Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
Nowadays Movies and television are of great importance in the society since they are largely used by people. By and large, they have considerable effects on people and youth are more vulnerable to these effects. There is great consensus among people who believe that their positive effects are more influential to young people, but I do not think in this way which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, most of youth are not well equipped to recognize whether the movies are based on fact or not. Moreover, most of the movies exaggerated about people 's wealth, love and this kind of things. In this regard, young people can not understand that a lot things just happen in the movies and we should not compare our lives with them and judge our circumstances related to what we have seen in the movie. Considering this issue, these kinds of negetive effects would affect young people' behaviours. My own experience is a compelling example of this. I remember that when I was in highschool, I watched a movie which the girl in the movie had a really expensive car, and all the time I was sad due to the fact that I had compared my own life with hers and I felt depressed about that why I have no car. As a matter of fact, I was not mature enough to undertand that it had been just a movie and has not based on the reality of life.
Second, unfortunately, these days action moveis are really fame and there are a lot of people who advocte them. Furthermore, these especial kinds of movies persist on violent and aggreessive which are realy influential, specially on youger people than adults. Therefore, if teenagers watch these kind of movies, their behaviour would change in the way that they would become more aggresive. In respect to this matter, their behaviour would changes negatively. For example, two years ago when my brother was in highschool, he used to watch action movie all the time. During that time, we always had argument and he caused conflict within family. after a time, I could understand that how his behaviour had been changed due to the movie he had watched, and he had become so aggressive.
Finally, based on what have been mentioned above, I firmly believe that movie on television would have a lot of negative effects on young people. Not only are they not well equipped to recognize that all aspect of movies are not real, but also they become aggressive since the most popular movies are action movie which are so poweful to affect children.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, furthermore, if, moreover, really, second, so, therefore, well, for example, kind of, as a matter of fact, by and large, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2049.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 441.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.6462585034 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58257569496 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49943818534 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.473922902494 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 653.4 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.0574604336 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.842105263 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2105263158 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.10526315789 5.45110844103 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233384858749 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0747463151262 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.062007691255 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163592530149 0.150856017488 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0731509205445 0.0645574589148 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.99 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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