Some people like to record their life by sharing pictures and other information on social networking sites. Others keep this information to themselves and never share it online. Which do you prefer?
The world is becoming increasingly smaller and closer with the development of information technology. With the help of social platform such as Facebook and Twitter, it only takes some finger touches on the screen to associate people all over the world. Many people doubt if this trend of globalization is a boon or bane. But before a quick judgment on that grand argument, we should consider a more practical issue, whether or not we should participate in the social platform actively and post our photos and information on those sites? I believe we should do so. My reasons are listed as follows.
To begin with, it is a good way to record your life. Nowadays everybody tends to be too busy on his/her commitments: students study hard to get a grade to get employed; workers work day and night to win a promotion opportunity; parents spend huge amount of time on taking care of their children. We are so occupied that all these hassles in our lives even make us forget the real essence of our lives and the very crucial question like "who we are and where we are going". Thus, social platform offers us great opportunities to slow sown our paces, to forget all the anxious uncertainty in the future and focus on the pleasure of the moment. It reminds us of the pleasure of living if we post our recent photos regularly on the websites. When we feel exhausted one day, we may stop our work for a moment, read all the threads we posted before, it would be a encouraging thing and could definitely make us feel refreshing and promote our morale.
Additionally, it could bring more opportunities for us if we express ourselves positively online. First, we can make friends through these social platforms. To keep in touch with friends, it is always necessary to post some photos and share some new information with others. The friendship can even cross the geographical and cultural barrier. Personally, I maintain friendship with my Canadian friends I made in my exchange term to University of Toronto by updating my photos on Facebook. It is really fun to share pictures with people around the world and it always makes me delighted to read comments and communicate with them. Second, we can even get working opportunities if we are lucky enough. For instance, last year my brother posted his application for a part-time job on Twitter, soon his friends recommended him to many interesting jobs. As you can see, participating in online photo and information sharing can really facilitates job finding process a lot as well.
Admittedly, some people may point out that we may leak some important information online and it would be a waste of time to indulge ourselves in these virtual realities. For the first part of the argument, it is true that we take some risks to post our private information, but I believe the reputation of big companies that they will strive to protect our information security. Plus, the technology development could help at least alleviate the problems in the future. As for the second part, it makes no sense to deny the use of online social platform simply because we may use it excessively. I maintain that as long as we can control the time and frequency of the use of those social APPs, the advantages above largely outweigh the disadvantages.
All in all, I prefer to share my photos, my feelings and my thoughts online. It helps us record our lives, thus keeping track of our growth; it offers us opportunities to open ourselves to some new people, new ideas and even great chances.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...should consider a more practical issue, whether or not we should participate in the social pla...
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Line 3, column 867, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...e threads we posted before, it would be a encouraging thing and could definitely ...
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Line 7, column 494, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s in the future. As for the second part, it makes no sense to deny the use of onl...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, really, second, so, thus, well, as for, at least, for instance, such as, it is true, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 90.0 43.0788530466 209% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 75.0 52.1666666667 144% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2927.0 1977.66487455 148% => OK
No of words: 611.0 407.700716846 150% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79050736498 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.97176167858 4.48103885553 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78470871141 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 307.0 212.727598566 144% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502454991817 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 925.2 618.680645161 150% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 22.0 9.59856630824 229% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.8582533093 48.9658058833 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.535714286 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8214285714 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.25 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151271611672 0.236089414692 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0435926416935 0.076458572812 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0435114078839 0.0737576698707 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0924461759941 0.150856017488 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0338238792763 0.0645574589148 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 129.0 86.8835125448 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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