Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Internet plays important tool in our daily lives by providing people with plentiful resources. Some people believe Internet gives people a lot of valuable information. However, I personally think access to much information creates problems, because there might be some false information and private information that other people should not see it.
First of all, there are accessibility for everyone to get information in modern days. As not all of those people are experts or professionals, some of the information might be fake. For example, when I was researching for my project paper, I found a website called Wikipedia. I found there are countless resources and information, which was helpful for me to finish at time. However, after few days, my professor called me to her office, and told me that most of my information is incorrect. She told me that there are numerous websites with fake and false information, which students should be careful with. After this, I had to check whether the website is credible based on my experience. Therefore, access to much information can create problems, as there might be fake information.
Secondly, due to advanced technology, there might be exposure of another people's private information, including mine. If the Internet website is not secure, it is possible for hackers to steal the information from your device, and expose it. Once, my sister got arrested because she accidentally went into website, where someone's privacy was disclosed. All of the people who clicked into the website including my sister, had to be victimized. Although this was the trap planned by the hackers, my innocent sister had to be blamed for all of this accidents. Hence, as it is shown in the example, overload of information could lead to violating individual's privacy.
In conclusion, access to overabundance of information is risky, as it might include false information and one's privacy, which causes serious problems. This can show that internet is not perfectly safe.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ople should not see it. First of all, there are accessibility for everyone to ...
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Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...se people are experts or professionals, some of the information might be fake. For example,...
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Line 5, column 354, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: All the
..., where someones privacy was disclosed. All of the people who clicked into the website inc...
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Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...cent sister had to be blamed for all of this accidents. Hence, as it is shown in the...
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Line 7, column 107, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
... it might include false information and ones privacy, which causes serious problems....
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1689.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 324.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21296296296 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94233269253 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.533950617284 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 537.3 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 10.0 3.51792114695 284% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.2304213129 48.9658058833 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 88.8947368421 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0526315789 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.26315789474 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.276415658502 0.236089414692 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.092295228218 0.076458572812 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0859979077807 0.0737576698707 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.202269827283 0.150856017488 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.133838425484 0.0645574589148 207% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.64 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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