Some people like to keep a record of their own experiences by uploading pictures and other information to social-networking sites. Other people prefer not to create such records.Which approach do you prefer, and why?Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Some people believe that uploading people's own experiences are risky and not private. However, I think posting one's own experiences can be one kind of ways to record their life and memories, and one kind of tools to help faint-hearted people.
First of all, recording and uploading pictures and other information to social-networking
sites can be one part of individual's memory during their life time. Posting photos about one's life might be the best way to record, because it would not be gone, unless that person deleted the post on purpose. For example, my mom has started her own Youtube channel since she was eighteen. She uploaded her life videos, such as first time going to the bar, traveling with her friends, and studying in the coffee shop. Decades have passed, and I could see not only her youth, but also her life information and beautiful memories that I did not know about her. Therefore, momentous record can be remarkable, by looking back at their memory they had gone through in the past.
Secondly, by uploading those records, it may help that person to easily socialize with others. Some people have trouble associating with people, especially in the new environment. Social-networking sites benefits those people, because it helps them to share and look at others life without facing them in the reality. For instance, when I first moved to Canada, I had hard times making friends because I was a timid girl. My neighbor recommended me to download the app called Instagram. After I downloaded it, I uploaded pictures of myself with hashtags. Then, random people started to like my post and follow my account. Some followers even commented about my life pictures. This help me to get rid of loneliness, and interact with various people around the world. Hence, posting photos and information in social-networking sites have many advantages, giving more chance to make different friends.
In conclusion, uploading people's own experiences would leave record, which include their important time of their life. Also, it can assist introverted people to socialize with various people, using social-networking sites. These are the reasons that I prefer to share records of my life to the others.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 90, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Message: Did you mean 'lifetime'?
Suggestion: lifetime
...part of individuals memory during their life time. Posting photos about ones life might b...
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Line 4, column 90, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...g their life time. Posting photos about ones life might be the best way to record, b...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, kind of, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1857.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 364.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10164835165 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82626355254 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.554945054945 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 573.3 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.2251715427 48.9658058833 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.4285714286 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3333333333 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.04761904762 5.45110844103 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.291053488396 0.236089414692 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0883875009308 0.076458572812 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0779546810211 0.0737576698707 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.215755223437 0.150856017488 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.103332486853 0.0645574589148 160% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.0 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 90, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...d other information to social-networking sites can be one part of individuals mem...
^^^
Line 4, column 58, Rule ID: LIFE_TIME[1]
Message: Did you mean 'lifetime'?
Suggestion: lifetime
...part of individuals memory during their life time. Posting photos about ones life might b...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 90, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...g their life time. Posting photos about ones life might be the best way to record, b...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, kind of, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1857.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 364.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10164835165 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82626355254 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.554945054945 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 573.3 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.2251715427 48.9658058833 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.4285714286 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3333333333 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.04761904762 5.45110844103 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.291053488396 0.236089414692 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0883875009308 0.076458572812 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0779546810211 0.0737576698707 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.215755223437 0.150856017488 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.103332486853 0.0645574589148 160% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.0 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.