Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information Others think access to so much information creates problems Which view do you agree with Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to so much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with?

Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Internet has become an essential high-tech service for our society. It is thought by some people that the information that the Internet creates different types of problems. However, In my view, people could tackle a lot of valuable information which could make their lives better. I feel this way for two main reason, which I will explore as follows.

First of all, the Internet is a very important service, which could provide people with a variety of information that is crucial for their work. My experience as a student who used internet during the university years, it is a compelling example of this. About a decade ago, I was studying for my final exams. The time that I had available was limited,so I did not have time to commute to the university's library to find the material that I needed it. However, I easily found my solution. I used the Internet, and found more information for my theses than the library would have given to me. As a result of that, I did not loose my time, instead,I was just focused on studying all those useful materials that I got from the Internet. Because of this, I strongly believe that the information that we get from the Internet is valuable.

Secondly, we all should take into account the fact that using internet, which provide us with a broad sea of knowledge has really changed peoples lives. Nowadays, our entire society has changed because of new opportunities of getting informed. People think differently than before. For example, a couple of decades ago, an average person was not able to even solve his own problems. This was because he did not have access to services that rich people had. Today, people are more informed, they have more options, which could help them to find a better way of reaching out their success. Internet with all the information that provides, its a key factor of people's success all around the world. Overall, people have more knowledge just because of the information they read on Internet.

In conclusion, I believe that Internet provides us with such a valuable information, which has changed people's lives and helped them to succeed.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 136, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e that the information that the Internet creates different types of problems. How...
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Line 3, column 352, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , so
...he time that I had available was limited,so I did not have time to commute to the u...
^^^
Line 3, column 624, Rule ID: LOOSE_LOSE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'lose' (= miss, waste, suffer the loss etc.)?
Suggestion: lose
...n to me. As a result of that, I did not loose my time, instead,I was just focused on ...
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Line 3, column 646, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , I
...f that, I did not loose my time, instead,I was just focused on studying all those ...
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Line 5, column 527, Rule ID: HELP_TO_FIND[1]
Message: This phrase is probably grammatically incorrect. Write 'help them find' instead.
Suggestion: help them find
...ed, they have more options, which could help them to find a better way of reaching out their succ...
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Line 5, column 638, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...with all the information that provides, its a key factor of peoples success all aro...
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, really, second, secondly, so, even so, for example, i feel, in conclusion, as a result, first of all, in my view

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 13.8261648746 14% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1763.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 365.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.8301369863 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5997877997 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.520547945205 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 559.8 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.9419940032 48.9658058833 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.9523809524 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.380952381 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.28571428571 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.311225956843 0.236089414692 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0966916921164 0.076458572812 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0785627189008 0.0737576698707 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.209120250946 0.150856017488 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0316562126838 0.0645574589148 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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