Some people say that the internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to so much information creates problems”. Which view do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The 21th century has brought a great deal of technological innovations. The technology such as Internet, smartphones, smart watches, computers and so on, is all around us and has already become an integral part of our life. The internet is one of the most genius inventions of our time. With this global network we have a quick access to a lot of valuable and up to date information. Moreover, the internet is very beneficial for us in aspects of social function and internet services.
First of all, the internet provides a quick access to a considerable amount of information. We can find millions of links, webpages, and web sites within few seconds to our search. It is very helpful for us in our time because every single minute is precious. For example, when I was about to graduate from high school and I was supposed to apply for a university very promptly because the admission deadlines were going to be over very soon. But I couldn’t find any suitable university that matches my money needs and future intentions. But one day something occurred to me and I started to search for universities on the internet. And surprisingly, I found several perfectly matching schools in a wide range of universities within three hours. In short, the internet gives a quick access to a lot of information which is very useful to collect necessary data in short period of time.
Secondly, the internet provides the latest information which is, from my point of view, very beneficial for us. The internet keeps us up to date because the information is always updated and that is how we know the latest and urgent news, research results, and so on. For example, our parents used to go to libraries to make project or paper works by doing a huge research. Unfortunately, the data in books was so old and irrelevant that they fail to pass important exams. Moreover, the internet is very useful to save our climate. For instance, we can’t keep data in books up to date and it requires a lot of effort and investment as well. Besides we will cut off a considerable amount of trees to make papers, and then publish them as books. This will make our environmental issues even worse. In brief, the internet gives the latest information to us which is very useful for us.
Last but not least, the internet is very helpful because of its services and functions. There are a mass of interesting applications, services, web sites, web channels such as Skype, Telegram, WhatsApp, Tandem, and etc. that help us to learn something new, to communicate with others even though they are far away, and so on. For example, I communicate with my friends from other countries and we always help each other by practicing and exchanging our languages via video or audio calls or internet. By doing this I improved my speaking skills in English before taking an IELTS exam. It was really helpful for me. In short, the internet can be really helpful in aspects of services and functions.
To conclude, internet is a great innovation and it provides a lot of valuable and up to date information with very quick access to it. Moreover, internet is very helpful to get in touch and communicate with friends and family.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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... time. With this global network we have a quick access to a lot of valuable and up to date inf...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, if, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, then, well, for example, for instance, in brief, in short, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 32.0 13.8261648746 231% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 84.0 52.1666666667 161% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2650.0 1977.66487455 134% => OK
No of words: 556.0 407.700716846 136% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76618705036 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.85588840946 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79054862663 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 262.0 212.727598566 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.471223021583 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 837.0 618.680645161 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 13.0 3.08781362007 421% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.86738351254 428% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.6003584229 150% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.6762142906 48.9658058833 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.4838709677 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.935483871 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.67741935484 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 22.0 11.8709677419 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18447266891 0.236089414692 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0536106226205 0.076458572812 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0551289327866 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126667138618 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.040722963925 0.0645574589148 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.09 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.43 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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