Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The internet is a very important part of our lives. It is the tool that we use to communicate with our friends, to watch our favorite series, and a big source of news. Some people would believe that the access to this huge amount of information creates problems; others would disagree. In my view, internet provides to people a lot of valuable information for two important reasons.
The main reason is that we can find different views from the same information. In order to create an unbiased summary from a information, we need to read from different sources with different views. The internet is a very useful way to do that, we can find blogs and pages from a large range of political views, from extreme right to extreme left-wing. For example, I'm now living in Brazil, and the new president is trying to approve a new emend that will change all the public retirement system. Nowadays, the country spend almost 25% of it income to pay retired people, in contrast education and health system receive only 3% each. However, it is a very controversial subject because it will increase the minimal age that people will be able to apply for retirement and also will decrease the amount paid. The mainstream brazilian media usually have left-wing thoughts, in that way they are against this change. All the news are talking about how bad it will be for the nation. Conversely, on the internet I could find a lot of different sources. Also, there are a lot of left-wing blogs that are advocating with the change and the majority of right-wings are also approving. As a result, using the internet I was able to create a broader view from the problem and reaching a different conclusion if was just getting the information from the traditional media. This event clearly demonstrated that the internet could provide a lot of valuable information for people.
Another reason is that the internet is the fastest way that we can use to access information. If an event happens in any part of the world, the information will be available to us in a few minutes. In addition, we can use our social medias to contact friends and ask about something that happened and they could provide first-hand news about it. For instance, last month, when there was a fire on the famous French church, the Notre Dame. I remember that I was watching television and a friend of mine texted me about this. Immediately, I entered on the internet and that was already tons of information available to me. Also, there were different people doing "lives" close to the church to show what was happening. However, about thirty minutes after, I realised that the television channel that I was watching started to show the news and they gave just an short introduction and told to the viewers that all information will be available on their website or the evening news. This experience taught me that the access to the internet is very helpful to people.
In sum, though some may believe that access to much information creates problem, the internet can provide a lot of valuable information to people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, conversely, first, however, if, may, so, as to, for example, for instance, in addition, in contrast, talking about, as a result, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2553.0 1977.66487455 129% => OK
No of words: 533.0 407.700716846 131% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78986866792 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80487177365 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70054958272 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.461538461538 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 796.5 618.680645161 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.2891065461 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.1923076923 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.57692307692 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252753702695 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0738261983691 0.076458572812 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0744698969817 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.200082364926 0.150856017488 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0757145363212 0.0645574589148 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.5 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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