Some people say that “Money makes the world go round”; others say that “Money is the root of
all evil”. Which of these do you agree with? Use examples and details in your answer
Money are essential tool for buying goods and paying for services since ancient times. Nowadays with the help of banks and loan associations money drives the whole global economic. I agree with the following statement that money makes the world go round and I will provide some supporting explanations in the subsequent paragraphs.
First to support my answer, money in different currencies are fundamental for businesses and other sectors in each country. In fact, they move the economic as form of taxes, fees, salaries and investment. Consequently, money boosts up the economy not only in a particular country but also in a global aspect. Also many countries don't have production of some goods, therefore rely on imports from other countries. This in turn support the economy of exporting countries when they earn from fees and taxes. That prevalent practice turned into a chain between various of governments around the globe and of course it would have happened without money which are the main key. Since, my country started exporting rose oils to some developing countries in Europe such as France and Spain, our GDP ramped up with 20 percents. Accordingly, citizens increased their welfare because of the little bettered economy. As a result, people had more salaries, the retired fund ameliorated and the rate of people's investment in properties, shares and stocks also increased. If money had not taken place, this would not have happened.
Moreover, money supports health system which is crucial for humankind. There has been numerous investment in trendy equipment, new medicament and experimentation. It is because many new diseases has appeared and the world medicine must fight with. However, that would not be possible without financial aid. For example, some countries facing difficulties fighting against rapidly changing diseases because of inadequate capital. Although, it is often said that money can't bring about health I consider that without money, myriad of medical achievements and advances would not have been possible.
In conclusion, I believe that money makes indeed the world go round as they keep the economy up. That is with the help of taxes and fees. Also, the health system is being supported by investments.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider using third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'is'.
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Suggestion: Also,
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
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Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, consequently, first, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, as for, for example, in conclusion, in fact, of course, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1889.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 359.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26183844011 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71302900409 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.604456824513 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 575.1 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.6190820806 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.8636363636 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.3181818182 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.22727272727 5.45110844103 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233454857125 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0636695128742 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0649999861875 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158133372977 0.150856017488 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0468663658854 0.0645574589148 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.93 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.87 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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