Some people suggest that it is wrong to give money to beggars asking for money on the street, while others think that it is the right thing to do. Which point of view do you think is correct, and why?
There are a lot of homeless people begging for money that we see on the street. I believe that it is wrong to give them money because they can work and earn for themselves instead of begging for money. I think this for two reasons which I will explore in my essay.
We all hear a lot of news about people who kidnap children and force them to beg. This is a business for them. If we take pity on the children and keep giving money to them, the business will go on. So I believe that we should not give money to these children. Whenever I find such a child begging for money, instead of money I always give them food. So that way, the money does not go his employer who forces him to beg and that child has something to fill his stomach.
There are adults who beg for money also. I never give them money or food because it encourages them to continue begging. Instead of begging they can work and earn money but they choose not to do that because they are getting money sitting, doing nothing. For example, I know a friend who would give money to the beggars she say on the street. There was one particular beggar who lived near her house and she would regularly give him money. One day, she asked him why he did not work instead of begging. He replied that if he worked, he would get only a little more than what he got from begging and the work was physically straining and he felt it was better to sit and beg for money. That day my friend realized that people do not only beg because they cannot do anything but they are looking for an easy way out.
In conclusion, I believe that people should not give money to beggars on street because it encourages them to take the easy way out instead of working hard and if the beggars are children then they may be stuck in a begging racket and giving money to them would be wrong as the money would go to their employer and not them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: as well
... There are adults who beg for money also. I never give them money or food becaus...
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...ay out. In conclusion, I believe that people should not give money to beggars ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, may, so, then, for example, i think, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 66.0 43.0788530466 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 8.0752688172 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1524.0 1977.66487455 77% => OK
No of words: 364.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.18681318681 4.8611393121 86% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.04037853051 2.67179642975 76% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 212.727598566 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.431318681319 0.524837075471 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 467.1 618.680645161 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.3927234981 48.9658058833 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.6666666667 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2222222222 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.94444444444 5.45110844103 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.28963353206 0.236089414692 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114641565572 0.076458572812 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0551548069693 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.206184513253 0.150856017488 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0505337586683 0.0645574589148 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.4 11.7677419355 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 76.56 58.1214874552 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.02 10.9000537634 64% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.23 8.01818996416 78% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 86.8835125448 43% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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