Some people think that children should begin their formal education at a very early age and should spend most of their time on school studies. Others believe that young children should spend most of their time playing. Compare these two views. Which view do you agree with? Why?
Childhood is an important stage of everyone's life and has a profound influence on their future life. Personality traits of a child develop mostly at an early age. So, the kind of activities in which a child is involved affects his/her character and determines the future path of their life. The question is whether children should spend most of their time on school studies or playing. From my point of view, a child should spend most of his/her time playing. I will give my reasons in the following essay.
First, children will have enough time to study in the future while childhood never comes back. When people look back on the past years they like to remember a lot of sweet childhood memories. Needless to say, sweet moments don’t occur at studying time but at playing time with peers. For example, I remember myself as a child who liked playing with his friends with a plastic ball in alleys. We played hours in alleys and never got tired. I didn't like to stay at home and study all day. However, when I got older I understood the importance of education and allotted more time to study and became a diligent student whereas you can't expect a child to perceive the significance of education. Therefore, we should allow children enjoy their childhoods and study when they get older.
Secondly, studying is not the only way towards success. Some students simply don't have an aptitude for subjects that are taught in schools or some of them can't adapt with formal education while they are brilliant in other fields such as sports, business, music or other kinds of art. For instance, I have a nephew who was not a keen pupil at school and he always got poor grades. One day, I brought him to a music concert, he got interested in playing DAF – that is a traditional Iranian instrumental music – and his father sent him to a music class. Now, he is 25 and is one of the best DAF players across the country (Iran). He sat up his own music institute a few years ago. He has got too many pupils so that he depends on teaching music for his livelihood. Thus, we shouldn't force children to spend most of their time on school studies if they are talented in other fields.
In sum, I believe that we should let children enjoy their childhood playing with their friends. By doing so, they will have good memories when they are adults and they may show talent in other fields. If I were a father, I would definitely allow my children play outdoors with their peers and grow up with happiness. Permit your children play and enjoy, they will have enough time to study in the future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, whereas, while, for example, for instance, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2121.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 466.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.55150214592 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64618479453 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37564115754 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.50643776824 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 633.6 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.9764090873 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.5769230769 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9230769231 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.15384615385 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.30309616031 0.236089414692 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0911705130679 0.076458572812 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.11889137951 0.0737576698707 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.198662830317 0.150856017488 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0940282984138 0.0645574589148 146% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.81 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.16 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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