Some people think that children should begin their formal education at a very early age and should spend most of their time on school studies. Others believe that young children should spend most of their time playing. Compare these two views. Which view do you agree with? Why?
As the fast pace of growing world’s civilization, resulting in developing in many fundamental sides of human being such as economy , transportation, trading and especially education which is also one of important side to make the next potential worker in the future and improve our country. Nowadays some people encourage to give children the faster formal education, while others use the means that is letting them spend their time on playing. I personally agree with the first point which they should give early formal education for several reasons which I will explain in this essay.
Firstly, the faster giving them knowledge, the better they are, due to the fact that children are easily taught by their teacher and they can learn and absorb knowledge so fast than a teenager. So that you can shape them as their desire. If they are well – educated at first, It will affect their future as well. They can possibly our powers to continue improving our country. As currently, Many countries are competing with others to develop their own country. And this method would be another powerful one. For example, English language is the most used in the world and It is an international language as well, Which means that if any countries can have English skill they will probably have much more benefits than others. Therefore, Other countries are giving importance to education and they encourage their children to learn more language skill by various means to create their skillful people in the future.
Secondly, From this action, It can also fasten children to find their aptitude. School provides various subjects which are all directly beneficial to them like social study ,math, science etc. Moreover ,All of these subjects not only give them basic knowledge But also they can go further by learning more about their favorite subjects. And consequently, It could possibly be the base of having a good career in the future. For instance, my friend has studied the English language for 13 years. He has the best overall English skill in our class. He is able to communicate with foreigners fluently as if a native speaker and write every type of letter. , But He is just 15 years old. He told me that he found himself when his first try of using English language.
To sum up, Giving early formal education to children has many effects to them and also their country because they can be our great support to improve our country and the children can find what they are good at faster, so it has an impact to their career in the future as well.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, firstly, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2119.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 437.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84897025172 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57214883401 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46429034315 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521739130435 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 648.0 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.9546959439 48.9658058833 151% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.904761905 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8095238095 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.95238095238 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2320081818 0.236089414692 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0657982164188 0.076458572812 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0740835702765 0.0737576698707 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153962968292 0.150856017488 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0592264235502 0.0645574589148 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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