Some people think that family is the most important influence on young adults. Other people think that friends are the most important influence in young adults. Which view do you agree with? Use examples to support your position.

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Some people think that family is the most important influence on young adults. Other people think that friends are the most important influence in young adults. Which view do you agree with? Use examples to support your position.

As human beings, we need someone to lead us at our youth period.It is an obvious fact that we affect from others more or less. Some argue that juvenile impress from their friends more than their family. Although friends play a central role in the lives of teenagers ,in my opinion , family is the most important impact on young people. My view is based on cultural, financial and psychological reasons.
First of all, culture is significant value for everyone.Our lifestyle derived from it such as accent, food,entertainment , relation with others. These concepts are learnt from family.
For instance;in my country in east region not only adults like spicy and peppery food but also children who grow up in there love this kind of food too.In addition to this,
Some families point of view about respect is different. While they are together with their father they don’t show their interest to children. Since it is interpreted as disrespect to father.
Secondly, people have different financial status.Some earn lots of money , the others not. The way they live generally depends on the economic power. For example; buying expensive clothes or spend money in luxurious restaurants are all about this status. Also young will spend money as same as their parents.Because they see how their family use money.
Lastly, psychology of people have similarities between family and children. In a house if somebody has a problem and if he is sad. That negative energy spread all house and everybody feel this. Moreover, if parents have always fight with each other, children will deduce it is a normal thing. And in the following ages they will act like their parents.
In conclusion, children always tends to follow their families footprints. They copy not only good behaviours but also bad ones.Despite the fact that , friends can affect each other in many cases , family has the most significant influence on young adults.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, lastly, moreover, second, secondly, so, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, such as, first of all, in many cases, in my opinion, more or less

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1609.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 316.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0917721519 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21620550194 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69636921162 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.623417721519 0.524837075471 119% => OK
syllable_count: 490.5 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.7152009522 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.45 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.8 20.6045352989 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.9 5.45110844103 182% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.53405017921 154% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 22.0 5.5376344086 397% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176367270104 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0439151269001 0.076458572812 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0588559393362 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0763287914688 0.150856017488 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0631816325494 0.0645574589148 98% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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