As a social being, we meet several people across our lifespan. People around us impose great influence on our behavior and lifestyle. They affect greatly to young people because they are still vulnerable and malleable. Some people say that friends are most important as they greatly influence young people, Others disagrees. In my view, unambiguously, family plays a vital role in nurturing the juveniles.
The main important reason is They spend important time with family. Even though juveniles spend their leisure time with friends, They spend most of the time with family. When they are with friends they like to play and talk about some trivial matters. This does mean that friends have more influence. All the life-related talk almost happens with family. Skills are developed because of influence by family on children. For example, when I was in class 3 I used to play a lot with my friends outside. I spend a lot of leisure time with my friends. But we just talk fun nothing else. Whereas important skills like how to behave, What to wear on what occasion is totally provided by my parents and brother. It would not happen if I am greatly influenced by my friends.
The second reason is that some adolescent consider their parents as a role model and they are greatly inspired by them. They see some unique characteristics or behavior in them. This paragon greatly inspires them. For me, my mother is my role model rather than any other people in the world. I saw some anomalous characteristics in her. My father passed away when I was only 10. My mother had done superfluous hard work to educate us. She makes us happy by buying us toys even though there is a deficiency of money. Now I realize that it is very hard to sacrifice yourself for others. And I am greatly inspired by her and I totally venerate her. This definitely shows that parents impose a great impact on their children.
In sum, there are numerous reasons that parents have more impact on children rather than friends. Not only parents provide them with psychological, financial and intellectual support but also they can become a friend to their children. This can not be possible with friends. They try to help their children to direct in a better direction.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 547, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: But
...end lot of leisure time with my friends.But we just talk fun nothing else. Whereas ...
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Line 5, column 433, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'She' must be used with a third-person verb: 'makes'.
Suggestion: makes
...uperfluous hard work to educate us. She make us happy by buying us toys even though ...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, so, still, whereas, for example, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1847.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 380.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86052631579 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41515443553 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53806887787 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.513157894737 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 566.1 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6003584229 146% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 20.1344086022 60% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 24.0763830802 48.9658058833 49% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 61.5666666667 100.406767564 61% => OK
Words per sentence: 12.6666666667 20.6045352989 61% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.2 5.45110844103 40% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18648344563 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0493075640363 0.076458572812 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0658468857648 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122323030301 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0944190485277 0.0645574589148 146% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.8 11.7677419355 66% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.76 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.02 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.14 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.8 10.0537634409 68% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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