Some people think that the government should spend as much money as possible on protecting the
environment. Others think this money should be spent on other things such as education and
healthcare. Which one of these opinions do you agree with? Use specific reasons and details to
support your answer.
It is critically important to protect and sustain our environment for future generations. Although, many people assert that education and health are essential sectors for a particular economy, government should spend more money on the environmental protection. I will explain why I feel this way in the following essay.
Firstly, by protecting the environment we respectively save human's life or lengthen it. No one can deny that our lives are at stake due to greenhouse gases and fumes released in the atmosphere that are hazardous by inhaling. Moreover, the ocean has been contaminated by industrial waste which lead to poisoning of many species. Practices such as fishing, distribution and consuming are risky in terms of our health condition. Therefore, environmentalists should undertake some measures to protect our ecosystem and reduce the possibilities many people to get sick from our own actions over the nature. For instance, last year my city was declared as the most toxic within Europe due to high levels of noxious particles in the air. Ashamed from that I was making research and tried to find out what are the reasons behind that. It turned out that all factories that emit greenhouse gases are off the city and that would not have been the core point. Also, the majority of the cars shifted from emission to unleaded gases. However, I found that these days the trend is to undermine all natural parks and deforest huge area of acres in the are close to my city in order to build up more private schools and flats. Along with this many elderly afflict from respiratory diseases because of polluted air. As we all know that the green belt helps not only to provide place for leisure time, but also to clear up the air that we breath and that's why the government should spend more money on the environment.
Secondly, when investing money in the ecology and more specifically in environment by using wildlife management can help to find new researches and open jobs in the field of speciation and environmental studies. That will foster finding a new sustainable energy, eco-friendly products, rare breeds, natural resources and many other achievements in a very profound way. However, for that purpose spending a considerable amount of money is need it and I firmly believe that government should support.
In conclusion, we all are aware of our environmental degradation which has adverse effect of our population. The reasons that government should spend money on preserving green belts and many endangered species are that people respiratory illnesses will be declined and definitely many breakthroughs and scientific studies in the area of the ecology and biology will be held.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1134, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...arks and deforest huge area of acres in the are close to my city in order to build up m...
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Line 2, column 1433, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: that's
... to clear up the air that we breath and thats why the government should spend more mo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2256.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 445.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06966292135 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59293186426 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87163403572 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.561797752809 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 717.3 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.4765423785 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.8 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.25 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.65 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2198839165 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0552768394908 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0532695974905 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142672792257 0.150856017488 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0208067715155 0.0645574589148 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.13 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 86.8835125448 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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