Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things we really don't need. Other say that advertising tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer?
Currently, many wealthy corporations undertake actions to advertise their products in variety of ways. Often we can come across on brochures, TV adverts, magazines and so on. I stand of the opinion that through advertising we are prone to buy things we don't really need and I will explain why I feel this way in the subsequent paragraphs.
First, when we see some tempting product on internet, TV or billboard it doesn't mean that we have frantic need of it. From business point of view this is a way that companies can sell readily their products in the quickest feasible way. They constantly implements ways to entice people's attention, as they use advertising as the most powerful. Therefore, many people buy products attracted by price, functions or other features that particular item has. A decision they made is based only on what they see like exclusive, however they realize later that the purchase is unnecessary. A psychological influence from adverts toward human encourage them to buy, without giving them a chance to ponder and discuss with other family members.
What's more about buying based on advertising is uncertainty about quality. We may consider that, due to the fact that there are many deceptive companies that are trying to sell their low-quality, expiring or even wasted products by using marketing. Definitely is risky to make a deal with a company for her products, without seeing, touching or testing them. According to me, in most of the cases people have products bought with the trust on adverts doesn't last too long, hence the products immediately turn into useless. If the adverts had not fostered us to buy their items, corporations could not have sold their low-quality products.
In conclusion I would say that marketing tools have impact on people and encourage them to buy more products without actual need form them. This is because they are lured from the short offer that may disappear soon. Also, nobody is guaranteed that purchasing products can be secure.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, however, if, may, really, so, therefore, i feel, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1671.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 333.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01801801802 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27180144563 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68350539429 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.603603603604 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 509.4 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.467391147 48.9658058833 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.2941176471 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5882352941 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.82352941176 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236493226725 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0700479506911 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0453270171525 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140937146984 0.150856017488 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0111353721067 0.0645574589148 17% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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