Some people think that governments should spend as much money
as possible on developing or buying computer technology. Other
people disagree and think that this money should be spent on more
basic needs. Which one of these opinions do you agree with? Use
specific reasons and details to support your answer.
Governments should consider a variety of aspects in spending their budgets for the needs of their countries that must be prioritized. Some are of the view that developing computer industry or buying computer technologies are more important than other types of needs and governments should consider view them as their first priority while others have the idea that there are other needs that are more critical for the societies. For the following reasons, I’m of the view that although computer science and technologies are important, more basic need such as developing infrastructures, paying attention to the education system, and health issues are definitely of higher priorities for the governments.
One of the most important needs for the development of a country is its infrastructure. The quantity and quality of the transportation system including roads, railways, and buses are highly effective in people’s daily life. We deal with these things each day of our life and there will be lots of chaos if for example roads, bridges, or airplanes get destroyed or do not work well. Spending money on housing and construction of houses are other important issues that are among the most basic needs of people which are also critical for people’s life. Developing important manufacturers such as manufactures related to food industry, automobiles, chemical, and oil industry is another high priority factor for a nation that must be addressed in the first rounds of plans designed by the governments. All of these matters are extremely important that should be given more attention than developing computer technologies.
Another major thing to be highly prioritized for society’s betterment is the educations system of a country. The most important wealth of a country is the manpower and it would be a proper education system that raises a powerful manpower. Without the knowledge of human the computers do nothing and no matter how a government spends on computer technology, a powerful network of scientists and specialists are is before to us the computers and technologies.
Furthermore, Health issues and the quality of medical treatments must be regarded as one of the most important factors for nations. In these days people struggle with lots of health issues and diseases that takes a huge amount of attention, money, manpower, and researches. How can we ignore health problems and fighting diseases at the expense of paying more attention to computer technology? Doing research on how to tackle deadly diseases, producing drugs which are critical for lots of people, and raising doctors and practitioners are much more important than developing computer technologies.
However, we cannot deny the fact that computer technology is a big requisite for today’s life and countries development as well. Computers are necessary for developments in technology, communications, transportations, constructions and in all scientific fields in general. There is no field of study that does not require computer. Yet, what we say is that computers and computer technologies are not the most important needs of countries and societies.
Based on the facts mentioned above, we can reach to the conclusion that although we should pay enough attention to the development of computer technology, however, the needs and priorities we mentioned above are definitely more vital for countries and governments first should pay attention to them as they are more influential for people’s quality of life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 83, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'educations'' or 'education's'?
Suggestion: educations'; education's
...ed for society's betterment is the educations system of a country. The most importan...
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Line 3, column 465, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e to us the computers and technologies. Furthermore, Health issues and the quali...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, however, if, so, well, while, for example, in general, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 33.0 15.1003584229 219% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 13.8261648746 195% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2982.0 1977.66487455 151% => OK
No of words: 551.0 407.700716846 135% => OK
Chars per words: 5.41197822142 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84493438435 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13955707918 2.67179642975 118% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.437386569873 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 909.9 618.680645161 147% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 72.9979343043 48.9658058833 149% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.0 100.406767564 141% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2380952381 20.6045352989 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.19047619048 5.45110844103 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196036763679 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0679232837125 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0421384743604 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115302472033 0.150856017488 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0224933055934 0.0645574589148 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 11.7677419355 146% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 58.1214874552 63% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.39 10.9000537634 132% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 131.0 86.8835125448 151% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.002688172 190% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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