Some people think that human needs for farmland, housing, and industry are more important than saving land for endangered animals. Do you agree or disagree with this point of view? Why or why not? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
The debate on the competition between preserving the land to cover human necessities like housing and farming and protecting the land for animals who are seriously at risk of extinction, have been going on for decades. While some environmentalists advocate for the wellbeing of animals over humans, others may think the opposite. In my opinion, protect the land to cover human demands takes precedence over animal protection. I feel this way for two main reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, the lack of space in big cities and the primary necessity of being close to jobs and schools, has provoke an increase in housing development projects and an expansion in construction sites. Is a general believe that life can be more pleasant and civilized in urban areas compare to rural zones. So, with this new tendency, the necessity of preserve more land has become a government's priority. In addition, because of the growing population, the necessity of expansion has taken precedence over other areas of interest, which have become a nightmare for developers that need to comply quickly with the city's demand. My own experience is a compelling example of this. I remember when I bought my house a few years ago. The neighborhood was small and quiet, with affordable mortgages, few cars on the road and noiseless places to visit. With the population's increase, the city's mayor, with the help of architects and other authorities, had to plan an urgent solution for an emergent problem. Starting two years ago, new houses and complex apartments were built, along with other amenities, and people started moving-in in a short time. Nowadays, the neighborhood where I live became in a beautiful municipality, where shopping places, theaters and restaurants try to please the high demand of population.
Secondly, is important to design an agricultural system able to support the population's demand, as well as to develop industries that provide jobs opportunities and ensure the well function and progress of a future city. For this reason, preserve the land is an important matter and people need to make aware on the importance of land preservation for future generations. Although animal conservation is crucial to keep endangered species from risk, I consider zoos and aquariums good places to take care of them. For example, I remember reading an article about the Ogallala Aquifers and the necessity of preserve the land and the water underground for crop development, so crops can continue growing healthy, providing the food supply needed to satisfy the increased population. Furthermore, the article not only supports the importance of land conservation and water resources management, but also invites to reflect on the overuse of land and the consequences for humans and the environment in the large run.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that preserve the land for building and farming purpose is more important than preserve the land for animals in great danger of extinction. This is because the land can be used to expand overcrowded cities, providing more space for houses, schools and factories, as well as for agricultural intentions to support the demand of the growing population.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 113, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'provoked'.
Suggestion: provoked
...of being close to jobs and schools, has provoke an increase in housing development proj...
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Line 2, column 386, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'governments'' or 'government's'?
Suggestion: governments'; government's
...sity of preserve more land has become a governments priority. In addition, because of the g...
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Line 3, column 909, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'reflecting'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'invite' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: reflecting
... resources management, but also invites to reflect on the overuse of land and the conseque...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, may, second, secondly, so, well, while, as for, as to, for example, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, as well as, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 43.0788530466 49% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 52.1666666667 136% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 8.0752688172 297% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2708.0 1977.66487455 137% => OK
No of words: 523.0 407.700716846 128% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17782026769 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78217453174 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93302728921 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 277.0 212.727598566 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529636711281 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 857.7 618.680645161 139% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.6407210722 48.9658058833 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.952380952 100.406767564 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.9047619048 20.6045352989 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.47619047619 5.45110844103 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2688708692 0.236089414692 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0803785583666 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0638011945816 0.0737576698707 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179956341864 0.150856017488 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0483707467825 0.0645574589148 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 11.7677419355 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.23 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 146.0 86.8835125448 168% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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