Some people think that human needs for farmland, housing, and industry are more important than saving land for endangered animals. Do you agree or disagree with this point of view?
For the last years, human population needs new farmland, housing and industry has been a controversial issue in the community lately. While some people claim that endangered animals face big extinction, others maintain that human population increase continually who need new farmland or job. Although the last side have some concern about human generation's future, I’m of the opinion that protect endangered animals which have limited life area, food and short life cycle. İf these animals sources are deplet by humans, it may be some risks which are; the next human generations can’t see endangered animals. Secondly, these animals are important balance of nature cycle. The last one, Human needs not important than other animals. I will check the details of my support with some tangible and examples in the following paragraphs.
Firstly, people need extremely sources in the last century when the world has undergone big changes. People depleted sources deeply that they did not concern about extinction. Although world witnessed a milestone in the technology era, people tend to ignore big damage of nature. Some kinds of endangered animals face big extinction. For example, some kinds of birds can not find flying route that aim fertilizing. American eagles are example for it. Because people hunted them for hunting other animals due to feeding their family. Now, only a few american eagle maybe find in the nature, and they are protect under national laws. İf people do not change consumer habits, next generations will not see American eagle.
Secondly, some people use pesticides which remove endangered kinds of animals. Because they give harm to their farmland where they grow plants for feeding urban population. But they neglect to protect American Eagles who are crucial part of nature. For example, some kinds of snakes are poison, and they could kill people for which they aim to take away them in farmland. On the contrary, these animals are basic kinds of nature; they feeding with rats which give damage wheat lands and other agricultural area. Moreover, they are disease carrier of some risky illness so that infect people. İf people do not aware of this balance, they will face some illness.
Lastly, human population grow day by day whomever do not hinder of it. Strict rules can not stop population booms, because industry need big human source in order to product goods. Via technology, people carry out balance that need serious interest part of all community in the world. They should be open mind and objectify, due to this, people can protect endangered kinds of animals. They are heritage of our ancestor for next generation. Technological developments are main point of balancing that can find new balance in the habitat of endangered kinds of animals.
To sum up, people must change their consumer behaviours and habits. The world population, especially some continents, will grow doubled. Many government can not stop it. Only all of community may be find with together, and contact temporarily, they can hinder of big extinction risks. People must respect of endangered animals life areas, because they have equal rights like us in the surface of world.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, lastly, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, while, for example, on the contrary, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 9.8082437276 214% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2694.0 1977.66487455 136% => OK
No of words: 519.0 407.700716846 127% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19075144509 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7730044521 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4907251449 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.477842003854 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 843.3 618.680645161 136% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 34.0 20.6003584229 165% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.6374549231 48.9658058833 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.2352941176 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.2647058824 20.6045352989 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.41176470588 5.45110844103 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.88709677419 266% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.284099207956 0.236089414692 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.076012937292 0.076458572812 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0515841060766 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166361772008 0.150856017488 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0600590743525 0.0645574589148 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.23 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 86.8835125448 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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