Some people think that human needs for farmland housing and industry are more important than saving land for endangered animals Do you agree or disagree with this point of view

There are different opinions on the lands used in various aspects. Some people think that land should be used for farming, housing or for industry purpose rather than raising trees for endangered species. However, other people argue that saving lands are must for species to live their life like human beings. If humans choose to utilize areas for their own perspective than raising forest for endangered species, I would adamantly oppose this idea. I feel this way for two significant reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, a group of each species becoming less and less in our world. For instance, decades ago, many different species used to live happily with their families in forests where foods are available for them. Nowadays, those species are very rarely seen across the world due to deforestation. In the same way, many species have a vital role in the ecosystem. All different species in the world have their own ability to make ecosystem balance. For example, birds play a wide variety of ecological roles, including forest degradation, insect pest control, nutrient recycling, bio-index of ecosystem health, plant pollination and seed dispersal. Some underground resident birds also help to erect air with their claws and raise the soil. As a consequence, all animals help us to save the environment.
In addition, for human desires, engineers constructing buildings with an advance infrastructure that uses most of the land and leaves no space for endangered animals. For instance, in the 19th century, there were many greenery villages where people used to live happily with their animals such as cows, goats, sheeps and so on. They used to feed them and get useful and natural products from them like milk from a cow, wool from a sheep, and etc. But later some time, there was no longer any animals in that village because of people constructed apartments for housing and buildings for companies and also industries. As a result, by constructing buildings, not only there is no space for endangered species but also a lack of natural products.
To wrap up, I strongly believe humans should save land for endangered animals to save species from the disappearance and to protect the ecosystem for living organisms.

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Average: 8.4 (26 votes)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, as for, for example, for instance, i feel, in addition, such as, as a result, first of all, in the same way

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1891.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 373.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06970509383 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39467950092 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63566554938 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.56836461126 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 590.4 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.8409522355 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.5263157895 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6315789474 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.47368421053 5.45110844103 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.320371405405 0.236089414692 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102104552286 0.076458572812 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0993923778847 0.0737576698707 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.220504701769 0.150856017488 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.102552331917 0.0645574589148 159% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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