Children are the future of the world. It is major responsibility on the teachers of an educational institution to manage curriculum and topics to be covered in school’s academic year. Although some people believe that teachers and education professionals should make all of the important decision about what subjects are taught in schools and collages, others believe that business and industry professionals should make all of major decisions. As far as I am concerned, I can agree with first option. I have explained my opinion in the following lines.
Firstly, as I believe that the teachers have a responsibility to identify skills and expertise of a student, teachers should arrange curriculum and events to be organised in an academic year. Moreover, an educational institution has a major responsibility to use the power of a student in which he/she likely to be succeed. It is unlikely to be done by business and industry professionals.
Secondly, history subject seems unimportant and irrelevant to not only students but also other people. So if business and industry professionals fail to recognize the importance of history subject, they will definitely exclude it from students curriculum. Ultimately, students of the future will fail to access details and stories about the history. Moreover, they will not understand the efforts that have been applied by freedom fighters for independence.
Furthermore, as far as I am concerned, there is very low importance of biology subject in business and industrial applications. But it has highest importance in medical field. If business and industry professionals intent to exclude biology subject from students study, it will suffer huge loss to world. Educational institutions can hardly be recognize skills of a student in medical field. The future world will possess lack of doctors and ultimately, medical facility will lead to deterioration.
In conclusion, in the view of the above, as I believe that an educational institutions and schools have major responsibility to identify skills and interests of a student in which he/she likely to be succeed in the future, we should not allow industry and business professionals to take major important decisions in schools. In addition, as industry and business professionals are only concerned with the students who have skills and expertise related to their field, they only will include subjects similar to that. Therefore, we should not allow industry and business professionals to take part in various schools study management system.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2164.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 399.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.42355889724 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46933824581 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.18058443703 2.67179642975 119% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.436090225564 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 695.7 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.4914179174 48.9658058833 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.2 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.95 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.65 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.33995822238 0.236089414692 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0942185884517 0.076458572812 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.133623918971 0.0737576698707 181% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.199390572307 0.150856017488 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.133771581492 0.0645574589148 207% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 58.1214874552 75% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 10.9000537634 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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