Some people think that we should keep away from others to improve our relationship, because being away from people reminds us of how important they are.
Others think we should always stay with others to have good relationship because we can communicate with them more often. What do you think?
In modern society, it is not easier to hold a good relationship than before because of the rapid speed of social life. Individuals nowadays have many things to complete and have little concern about others' businesses. However, to get along well with others is a critical problem, and needs some skills to improve the relationship. As far as I am concerned, we should always stay with others to achieve better interaction.
To begin with, staying with others more often means having more communication and interaction with others. Time is an indispensable factor in keeping a better relation. Only if persons keep in touch regularly, they will have more common topics in daily life and know more about each other. My own experience is a compelling example. When I was a college student, I had a very close friend named Janie, she was my roommate as well. We always went to the classroom and dining hall together. It seemed that we had an endless talk between us. When we both graduated from school and went to work in different cities, the meeting and corresponding of us become less and less. Until now, we have not seen each other for nearly five years. We both know little about each other. Accordingly, a healthy relationship needs gentle care and deserve more attention on it.
What's more, being with others usually means having more chance to improve the relationship. We can know when our friends need help and help them to conquer difficulties, the shared experience would make us be more close. On contrary, people live in different places hardly have opportunities to offer help to the one whom he expresses concerns about. There is also convincing evidence of it. Just like the couple who must be in love with each other deeply. But the survey indicates that when they set apart from each other no matter for what, their passion and enthusiasm would decrease largely. The reason why this could happen is that when one of them needs someone to talk with or help them, the other one always cannot achieve this or even do not know. This demonstrates how important communications are.
In conclusion, in order to keep a good satisfying relationship with someone, we should stay with them more often. On the one hand, regular interaction can help us understand deeply about each other, on the other hand, it will lead to unforgettable experience between the two, thus develop a closer and everlasting relation.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, however, if, so, thus, well, apart from, in conclusion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2014.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 413.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87651331719 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50803742585 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67024224481 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.569007263923 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 622.8 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.2582888642 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.56 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.52 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.48 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.363993164298 0.236089414692 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0970421711786 0.076458572812 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0621341652977 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.234924581427 0.150856017488 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0287596558485 0.0645574589148 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.49 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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