Some people think that we should keep away from others to improve our relationship, because being away from people reminds us of how important they are. Others think we should always stay with others to have good relationship because we can communicate with them more often. What do you think?
As time goes on, no one can turn a blind eye to the significant role of our connections with others especially our friends in people’s lives. Some people deeply think that keeping away from others is an important key for developing and improving our relationships. On the other extreme of the rope, the overwhelming majority of people believe that making close interaction and having continuous communication can improve our relationship in society. While both sides take their positions, personally speaking, I definitely believe that the second group carries more weight. In the following paragraph, I will cogently explain my reasons to justify my points of view.
As the first and paramount reason, staying with others especially our friends without any distance and having continuous communication with them can aware us of their problems, fillings, and difficulties effectively; hence, it encourages us to help them willingly which strengths and improves our relationship remarkably. To be more specific, in a close relationship, we can assign more time and energy to aware of our friends' difficulties and help them deal properly and efficiently with various problems. This action not only reminds that our friends are always near us and don't forget our connection but also improves our relationships surprisingly. To illustrate this, take my own experience as a compelling example. Five years ago when I was a master student in New York City, while my friends in Iran couldn't help me because of our long-distance, my roommates who were from Japan assigned more time and energy to teach me how to fulfill my projects and encouraged me to put a lot of effort to achieve my goals and dreams. Therefore, I always respect them and try to make a long relationship and improve it.
The second reason coming to my mind to substantiate my viewpoint is staying with others and having a close relationship with them enables us to talk about various subjects and understand each other’s ideas properly which improves our connections and makes a constructive relationship for a long time. In other words, having same viewpoints, similar ideas, and solutions about various and different subjects will give rise to a high, harmonic, and optimal performance in all tasks and make long improved relationships between group members. For instance, empirical research conducted by psychology master students in a university shows that students groups having improved connections as a result of a close relationship without any distance are more successful in completing tasks and projects in comparison to others that can’t see each other regularly and communicate every day. Since the members of the first group have a close connection, they can talk about their ideas, anxieties, and problems every day easily without ant limitation; hence, they are more creative and can find splendid ideas and purpose viable solutions and practical and rational approaches for different problems. In fact, they can work as a harmonic and integrated system for a long time optimally because of their improved relationship.
In conclusion, without any close interaction and communication with our friends, we can’t aware of each other’s problems; consequently, we can’t help each other. Moreover, continuous communication with our friends and discuss our ideas and behaviors can close us to each other which has positive influences on our performances.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, hence, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, while, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, as a result, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 34.0 13.8261648746 246% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2917.0 1977.66487455 147% => OK
No of words: 544.0 407.700716846 133% => OK
Chars per words: 5.36213235294 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82947280553 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09629059291 2.67179642975 116% => OK
Unique words: 267.0 212.727598566 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.490808823529 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 900.0 618.680645161 145% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 87.6782311764 48.9658058833 179% => OK
Chars per sentence: 162.055555556 100.406767564 161% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.2222222222 20.6045352989 147% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.22222222222 5.45110844103 151% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.366185320812 0.236089414692 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.12514314014 0.076458572812 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0861205675445 0.0737576698707 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.237367470318 0.150856017488 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0342474464936 0.0645574589148 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.9 11.7677419355 161% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.57 58.1214874552 56% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 10.1575268817 159% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.4 10.9000537634 132% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.98 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 133.0 86.8835125448 153% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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