Some people think that we should keep away from others to improve our relationship, because being away from people reminds us of how important they are. Others think we should always stay with others to have good relationship because we can communicate with them more often. What do you think?
Nowadays, there is a doubtful discussion among people whether we must be away from others to making a good relation or not. In my opinion, it is not a rational decision that we say being away is good method. That is due to relation is a factor that you will be able to identifying the personality of each person, moreover, distance is an agent that you cannot make new connection.
First and foremost, one cannot become familiar with any person, unless they have close relation. In other words, people normally conceal their characteristics from other people; therefore, it is hard for stranger that detecting their personality. For example, couple of years ago, I started a relation with a person that I had not any recognization about him. After several months I found that he is guy; thus, I had cutted our relation. Lack of familiarity was The cause of this event. Hence, the recognization of our friends will able us to making a rational decision.
Second, roughly, the distance between relation is the major cause of finishing a connection. Otherwise, as an old saying in Iran, " when you are not in sight, you go from heart," there were a huge number of friendships that when they had obligated to living split apart, their connection became weak more and more. For instance, I had friend that we were very intimate each other. After he has went to the United States of America for 2 years, our relation had became loose. Conesquently, we must accept this matter that the distance makes relation weak.
As outlined above, I, personally, disagree with the making a gap between relation. that is because of making a decision about initiating a connection without recognizing is not intellactual, being away has a momentous role in separating.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 13.8261648746 22% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1464.0 1977.66487455 74% => OK
No of words: 299.0 407.700716846 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89632107023 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82837571329 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.561872909699 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 467.1 618.680645161 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.4594599616 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.5 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6875 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0625 5.45110844103 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213369029432 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.069691125933 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0766202283187 0.0737576698707 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128418431968 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.053176841729 0.0645574589148 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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