some people think that zoos are cruel and should be closed, other people believe that zoos serve useful functions,which view point do you support?

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some people think that zoos are cruel and should be closed, other people believe that zoos serve useful functions,which view point do you support?

<span style="font-size: 19.36px;">All of us nearly went to the zoo to see a variety of kind of strange or normal animals, maybe for fun or for the scientific issue. We all think about zoos that place where animals trapped from their own nature and dwell. There are many people who agree to establish them, whereas there many disagrees. Personally, I am in two minds about this, I am with this institution for several reasons, and in some cases, while I also disagree in special cases, I will illustrate now.
First, I agree with Zoos if it was big and suited to animals, which mean that it provides them with large space as they used to be in nature, also if reasons for establishing them are to save animals who are threatened by extinction, that the zoos in these cases help to breed them to high numbers then separate many to forests. For instance, in Jordan the Gazelle is threatened by extinction because the people hunt them in the forest, so the government made special zoo for them named Dana in Lounge city. The second reason behind zoo building is to help the people to recognize and see a variety of types of animals doesn't exist in the middle east, and to increase your information and knowledge about their life. For example, When I went to Dana last year, I saw lions, bears, dolphins, sea otters, and sea horses that it was the first time I saw these species. It was a good experience to know also about their life from the coach was existed there.
The second opinion is that some Zoos are cruel and brutal and should be closed ,but just if they were unsuitable for life, in some zoos there is just a cage to trap those animals, no enough food, also unprovided with parks with enough space, as I think those zoos are opened just to make profit from visitors. For example, there is a zoo in my city include lions trapped in a cage, do you really think that this soil and water is enough for them? we should feel in them, this way really kills their soul to life, those creatures need to live in tribes and to sense in liberty in their kingdom.
In conclusion, The establishment of zoos depend on the purpose and the suitability of them to animals, I agree with zoo establishing if it was for reservation animals, while I disagree if it was brutal.</span><br>

Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, really, second, so, then, well, whereas, while, as for, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, kind of, in some cases

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1873.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 414.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.52415458937 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66188944947 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497584541063 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 586.8 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.1344086022 154% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 73.902862841 48.9658058833 151% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.076923077 100.406767564 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.8461538462 20.6045352989 155% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.0 5.45110844103 220% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197015244623 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0704090782278 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0514770987048 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120817228419 0.150856017488 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0403894167477 0.0645574589148 63% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 11.7677419355 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.93 58.1214874552 98% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.53 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.0537634409 143% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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