Some like to tour around the world in early stages of life, while others prefer to get old enough to travel around the world. Which one would you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your claim.
Traveling is often regarded as a common hobby that a lot of people are willing to spend a fortune to take a big journey around the world. Some people begin their tours in their early age, while some would rather postpone and explore the world when they are old enough. Personally, I prefer waiting for appropriate time until I reach my thirties to start traveling. I feel this way because of two reasons, which I will expound in the following essay.
To begin with, while people claim that younger age is the best fit for adventure, I think young age is the time for working and making contribution rather than abandoning their responsibilities and traveling. Young adults are full of energy, knowledge and aspiration; their fresh mind and flexibility could fit every job. This is when they should focus on their career, to learn from their precedents’ mistakes, improve working skills, and gain as much working experience as possible. The world evolves around young adults. They are to make vital decisions that affect community deeply. Look at the protest that is happening right now in Hong Kong: the participants are mostly young adults because they are the spirit of the country. Had they thought about traveling and enjoying life too soon, they would not reach their dream goal and fulfill what society expect them to do. Due to their major responsibilities to the community, the family, and even themselves, I believe that vacation and traveling could wait until their contribution is significant.
On the other hand, traveling around the world when I have grown a little older is more interesting, because I then would have gained enough of insights to experience and contemplate the world. It is true that traveling opens one’s view to the world, but only in the condition that they open their heart to welcome anew. Setting off too soon will not benefit ones if their eyes are closed and their minds are narrow, which is especially true to arrogant teenagers. Growing older means that my largess is ready for new experiences and new cultures. For example, older people appreciate nature’s value, hardly litter, or get incensed upon trifles, so it is easier to build a strong connection and benefit from traveling. Regarding of more compassion, more care and warmth than frivolous teenagers, I believe traveling at older age can create the stronger bond between us and the world, which makes the tour memorable.
In conclusion, I prefer postponing my world tour until later. This is because I would like to accomplish my role to the society, and because I would benefit more from traveling the world when I get older.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 364, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
.... Setting off too soon will not benefit ones if their eyes are closed and their mind...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, look, regarding, so, then, while, for example, i feel, i think, in conclusion, it is true, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2207.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 444.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97072072072 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5903493882 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69283012913 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.531531531532 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 670.5 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.0940282838 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.35 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.6 5.45110844103 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.239091582652 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0743272913877 0.076458572812 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0738596806154 0.0737576698707 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172886300825 0.150856017488 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0677823982574 0.0645574589148 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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