Some people believe that competition for high grades motivates students to excel in the classroom. Others believe that such competition seriously limits the quality of real learning.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
Modern schooling is becoming more and more difficult because diversity of societies. Students have to learn as many subjects, gain as much knowledge, and practicing regarding problems from many aspects as possible. While they are still seated in school, loving it or not, they get involved in a grade competition to earn prize and exalt from educators. Despite many bright sides of this high-grade competition to encourage students to excel in class, it endangers some issues in learning systems.
Firstly, it cannot be denied that competition for high grades is a great method to boost students’ performance in class. Higher grades equal higher rank, more mellifluous compliment, greater esteem, and expensive rewards. Who would not love the prize? It is a tempting reward for students, so they are willingly participating in the race of grades. To compete, they must listen to the lecture carefully, discuss the lesson actively, finish homework on time, and study hard for the exam. They are able to boost their score because of the forthcoming motivation parents and teachers have set. In fact, they could improve their grades profusely competing in the race, which is a terrific effect of the competition.
Furthermore, competition becomes mandatory in life, which should be prepared early at a time of school. Competition provokes ambition between classmates, so they could learn from each other’s strengths and weaknesses. It also reveals limitless boundaries that circumscribe a student, pushes them forward. For example, a retiring, timid student can transmute into an active, energetic public speaker after competing with a group in the contest only for high grades. Grade competition, in fact, promotes and realizes students’ covered potentials.
On the other hand, focusing only on high grades brings about unwanted effects. Schooling purposes is to elicit students’ potential and talent, train them more useful skills for future career, and give rise to compassion that is hidden inside them, whereas high score simply demonstrates the ability to study and adapt to school environment. The competition qualifies teaching student manners: they could get aggressive, depressed, antisocial, and hateful towards each other during the grade racing. It is common to witness young boys and girls too busy getting their nose in books that they lack social skills seriously. They hardly make friends, or communicate with their classmates, or join in school clubs because they are worried about scoring in class. That is why we should be alert of those insidious influences of the competition, so that we could stem it preemptively.
In conclusion, competition for high grades is a good method to encourage students’ performance in school, but it should be regarded only as one in many methods, and definitely not the final purpose of education.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, regarding, so, still, whereas, while, for example, in conclusion, in fact, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 33.0505617978 109% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 58.6224719101 99% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2446.0 2235.4752809 109% => OK
No of words: 449.0 442.535393258 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.44766146993 5.05705443957 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60321845022 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92778444669 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 257.0 215.323595506 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.572383073497 0.4932671777 116% => OK
syllable_count: 738.0 704.065955056 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 9.0 1.77640449438 507% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.5890614063 60.3974514979 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.347826087 118.986275619 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5217391304 23.4991977007 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.91304347826 5.21951772744 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.2758426966 165% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213222012108 0.243740707755 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0615025208595 0.0831039109588 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0449328052371 0.0758088955206 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131903943314 0.150359130593 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0226001889765 0.0667264976115 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.1392134831 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.33 12.1639044944 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.43 8.38706741573 112% => OK
difficult_words: 138.0 100.480337079 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 79.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.75 Out of 6
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