At some universities, students take part in making decision about the issues that affect daily life of everyone on campus such as how many hours the libraries should be open each day or what kinds of food should be served in the cafeteria. But at some universities, experts are hired to make these decisions, and students are almost never involved. Which approach do you prefer and why?
Universities typically provide spread spectrum of accommodations, recreational facilities and educational programs depending on their budget and reputation. Then, they sometimes need to make decisions which will affect daily life of students who live on campus. Therefore, when it comes to the question whether students should take part in making decision about issues which affect their daily life or allow experts make decision, different people adopt different attitudes depending on their characters and educational backgrounds. On the one hand there are people who adhere to the belief that students should participate since they can share problems which exist on campus with experts; on the other hand, others believe that students should spend their valuable time on important stuffs. As far as I am personally concerned, the latter carries further weight since not only should students spend their time on studying but also can experts make the right decision.
Studying is indispensable part of students’ life. In fact, students attend university to discover their talents and develop their skills through educational programs. Then, participating in such decision making process is just wasting of time. As a matter of fact, students should spend their valuable time on studying different books, conducting researches, going seminars and conferences and participating in scientific discussion and circles. Furthermore, being involved in such issues not only does it waste students’ time but also does it disturb students’ mind depriving them from concentrating on their study. In some case, they are expelled from university without finishing their study. Subsequently, students won’t become successful in future unless they just spend their time on studying.
In addition, experts have required knowledge to deal with such issues. In fact, an expert has spent several years studying and conducting researches how to manage these issues at university. Therefore, he can assess different dimensions of the issue so as to make the right decision. In this sense, an expert can talk to different students and hear their ideas and problems making his decision to meet their needs. Furthermore, since an expert receive money to manage these issues, then, they will be committed and responsible for his decision. Therefore, experts will be careful about their decision attempting to make all the students satisfied. Consequently, provided university hires an expert to deal with these issues, it will be beneficial for both students and university.
To wrap it up, students should spend their time focusing on studying and conducting research and they should leave such issues for an expert who can make the right decision. Therefore, if I were a student, I would spend my time to study different books regarding my research not become involved in such time-consuming issues.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 291, Rule ID: WHETHER[5]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "the question"?
Suggestion: whether
... on campus. Therefore, when it comes to the question whether students should take part in making dec...
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Line 5, column 251, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...ssess different dimensions of the issue so as to make the right decision. In this sense,...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, furthermore, if, regarding, so, then, therefore, as to, in addition, in fact, as a matter of fact, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2466.0 1977.66487455 125% => OK
No of words: 444.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.55405405405 4.8611393121 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5903493882 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91500265587 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.484234234234 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 738.9 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.1934623904 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.428571429 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1428571429 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.71428571429 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215775681556 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0764031289925 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0508007977676 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139101428826 0.150856017488 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0331865744373 0.0645574589148 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 11.7677419355 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.91 10.9000537634 137% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 10.002688172 155% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.247311828 156% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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