Some young adults want to be independent ASAP while others prefer to live with family members as long as they can.
Often, relationship between family members influences on the decision of young adults on whether they want to be independent or prefer to live with family members. According to me, to become a self-contained person is more preferable rather than living with family. I’m sure that many people will disagree and refute my point of view, but I feel this way for the following reasons.
To begin with, becoming independent proves your significance to your parents and is emblematic to the fact that their authority does not have an impact on you anymore, you are in control of your own live. This independency is indicated by your ability to manage problems without help of your parents, to earn money, to build your own house where rules, which define the way of your life, are set only by its possessor. Understandably, the listed indicators are vivid advantages of being an independent person. My personal experience is a compelling example of that. When I was at school, my dad used to scold me if I was delayed at a long-lasting party. Once, he had established the rule which stated that I was supposed to be at home after 11 pm, as a result of which I felt concerned and frustrated every time when my friends were trying to convince me to spend some more time with them. Now, I live apart from my parents, make money what makes me free of curfews and continuous reproaches on the fact that I live in their house and have to obey their dictations.
Secondly, when you are independent from your family, you start being more responsible for the money you spend, for the time you have, for the life you were given, for the people you are surrounded by and animals you tame. Previously, being worried about these issues was out of your business, since everything was being resolved by your parents or guardians. Obviously, being responsible for such things nurtures your character. For instance, my friend, Emil, he stopped living with his mother when he was 18. Consequently, he turned in to a completely different person, he learned how to cook, acquired knowledge on how to make money and manage his time, he even started to understand what medicines should be taken in case of some diseases. As far as I can remember, he had always dreamt of having a dog and now he has one, of which he takes care really well. As a result, he has become a better person able to be responsible not only for his life, but also for the life of his dog.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that being independent from others is way better than living with your family members.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 165, Rule ID: ACCORDING_TO_ME[1]
Message: This phrase can sound awkward in English. Consider using 'in my opinion' or 'I think'.
Suggestion: In my opinion; I think
... or prefer to live with family members. According to me, to become a self-contained person is m...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, if, really, second, secondly, so, well, apart from, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 15.1003584229 185% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 69.0 43.0788530466 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2122.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 453.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.68432671082 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61343653406 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67899690174 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.527593818985 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 671.4 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 57.5057968092 48.9658058833 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.888888889 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1666666667 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.77777777778 5.45110844103 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220621868486 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0790012174297 0.076458572812 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.109147718351 0.0737576698707 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186621747856 0.150856017488 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.103957893212 0.0645574589148 161% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.16 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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