Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Distributional issues of governmental budget constitute one of the major commitments of administration since incorrect funding entails serious problems in the future. As for supporting the arts or athletics, some people hold the opinion that their government should maintain Olympic teams. However, I believe that governments should support the arts for several reasons.
First, if a country lacks aesthetic enjoyment such as opera theaters, ballets, cinema, dances and so on, its people are going to become cruel, ignorant and immoral. The point is, as one of favorite writers, Maxim Gorky, said, “the arts humanizes people”, the confirmation of which are beloved fairy tales that teach us to be honest and kind, to tell only the truth, or plays, where compositors were eager to teach people what is good and what is not. If governments support will be directed towards development of the arts, it will be only beneficial for people. For example, in my home city, there was a writer who appealed to public through his plays with pleas to be more humane, to help each other. He used present his masterpieces in the streets since he did not have enough money to perform in theaters, which resulted in lack of audiences and he did not have an opportunity to be heard widely. Several volunteers of the city made a petition for local government in favor of this person to help him bring his thoughts to public. Since the time the government started funding him and his plays are performed broadly, people began to become more kind-hearted, responsive.
Second, existence of good sponsoring of the arts suggests holding such activities as contests, which will make youth become more involved in the arts. These events will stimulate their desire to surpass other people in such battles, which will develop and increase their willpower. My own example is a good confirmation of the point. All my life is a rivalry, competition between me and other people. This started when my parents decided that I would be able to play the violin. Since I was good at playing, my teacher started promoting me to participate in different contests. I used to train myself days and nights, I forced myself to learn and play more, I was able to overcome my desire of sleep. All these skills are still helping because those competitions have become a foundation for my character. Now, I will never give up in the face of fear and I will not care about the preparedness of my opponents.
In conclusion, I strongly believe in the idea that governmental support of art would be only beneficial for people. This is because it prevents them from committing unwanted actions and provides basement for their fortitude and stoicism.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, second, so, still, as for, as to, for example, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2266.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 455.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98021978022 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61852021839 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77105817954 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.547252747253 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 698.4 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.4408231891 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.904761905 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6666666667 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.47619047619 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.141882260703 0.236089414692 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0471218147451 0.076458572812 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0644741675516 0.0737576698707 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102736234288 0.150856017488 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0636359090033 0.0645574589148 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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