Every young adult gives their opinion whether to live with family or to live independently, and in some case it is up to the family. Most of the young adults want to live independently as soon as possible, I think living with family member as long as we can is the perfect way because of the reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, family especially our parents grow us very difficult. Our mother carry us nine months in her body with a lot of difficulty; she did not sleep days because of us, and whenever we were born, they grow us with lots of difficulty. But, it is not fair to leave our family when we grow up. We should live with our family as long as we can to serve our family when they are old, and they will not have the ability to work. In our country it is our tradition to serve the family as they get older. Son is more responsible for his family to serve them, and live with them as long as possible.
Secondly, live will be stressful without the family. If we live independently life will be very stressful and boring. As we today most of the people are suffered from depression, and I think the main issue is lonely. Young adults when grow up, they are going somewhere and leave their parents, so I think live will be meaningless on that time.
Moreover, it is not fair in our religion and country to leave our family when we grow up.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 259, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[2]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'be'
Suggestion: be
...ng with family member as long as we can is the perfect way because of the reasons ...
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Line 4, column 90, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ry to leave our family when we grow up.
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, i think, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1125.0 1977.66487455 57% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 263.0 407.700716846 65% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.27756653992 4.8611393121 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02706775958 4.48103885553 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.34310633995 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 126.0 212.727598566 59% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.479087452471 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 363.6 618.680645161 59% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.8291140249 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.5384615385 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2307692308 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.84615384615 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 11.8709677419 17% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.353393188088 0.236089414692 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.136447985677 0.076458572812 178% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.11071112271 0.0737576698707 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.216491795634 0.150856017488 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.155684705401 0.0645574589148 241% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 11.7677419355 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.54 10.9000537634 69% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.67 8.01818996416 83% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 86.8835125448 39% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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