In some cultures such as Indian culture, young adults live with their families for a long time, say until they are married. In contrast, in cultures such as American culture, young adults move from their parents as soon as possible. While both have their merits, as can be evidenced by the success and stability of the respective cultures, I personally prefer the idea of young adults moving away from their parents as soon as possible. I feel so for the following reasons.
When young adults move away from their parents at a young age, they have to earn to make a living. The struggles that they encounter while finding a job and managing their finances prepares them for their life ahead. If they continue to live with their parents, then some or all of these responsibilities are handled by the parents, robbing them of very valuable experience. I feel that it is easier to work hard and learn from failures as a young adult.
Similarly, people have to make many tradeoffs in life, which involve making emotional decisions. If people gain the ability to make such decisions at an early age, they will be more ready for the long life ahead. This also puts them in a better shape in comparison to their peers, in this competitive world. When living with others, people tend to rely on others to make decisions for them. Though they might benefit from others' help, they don't have to take responsibility for their actions at a very early age.
Finally, I feel there are some disadvantages to young adults moving away from parents hastily before they are ready. This is evident in cases where students move out of their parents' homes before going to college. Since the students lack sufficient funds to pay for their college, they are forced to either take loans or forego college. In such cases, where students are apprehensive of loans, it is better to move away from parents after college. Thus it is important to time the move such that some actions which need significant help from family won't have to be sacrificed.
To summarize, I feel that moving away from parents as soon as they are ready to start their independent life allows young adults to achieve the necessary financial knowledge and emotional strength.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...to work hard and learn from failures as an young adult. Similarly, people have to...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, if, similarly, so, then, thus, while, i feel, in contrast, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1836.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 384.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78125 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4547776192 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.473958333333 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 584.1 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.5896343347 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.6315789474 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2105263158 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.26315789474 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.329965189137 0.236089414692 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115863914634 0.076458572812 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0659495019186 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.210151355565 0.150856017488 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0740129093566 0.0645574589148 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.63 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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