Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better?
In today's competitive world in which we live, young adults are always in making decisions for their life, so that the quality of this decision separates their life from other persons. One of this decisions is their independency circumstances from their parents. The age at which young adults being independence from their family varies from one person to another. As far as I am concerned, due to this fact that youth should shape their goals and planning in the upcoming future, they have to select the independence option for several reasons, three of which-that is- preparation to face with difficulties, financial independency, and reaching their goals in the future are the most conspicuous ones.
To begin with, prosperous individuals follow a proper strategy in their life to scheduling and planning upcoming events of future and confer with experts to choose correct ways. In other words, consulting with our friends and relatives play a critical role in reaching our goals and having a confident life. But, we should never forgot one important fact that everyone recognizes his or her talent better than others, so the decisions for future planning is made based on a person's talent and attempts. In contrast, company with parents for long time makes a sense of feeling and emotions and affects one's conceptions about reality in the world. On the other hand, having exceeding dependency on parents takes thinking and planning ability from adult young. As a result, in near future they not only could not be a profitable man for their society, but also encounter with different problems in their individual life.
Second reason for this view is that the financial independency creates a sense of responsibility among the young adult and they live objectively in this competitive world. In recent years due to economical and political conflicts among the different countries in the world, humans have been faced with financial problems. For example, statistics confirm this fact that families had welfare situations in their life in compared to current conditions. Therefore, the parents cannot response to their children's demands from economic points of view and the youth have to focus their attentions and strives to bring proper education and working conditions independently. As a result, this financial independency not only decreases the economic concerns of parents against their children, but also open new world to the young adult to be active in the life.
Last but not least, one day all people should response due to their works in the life. If children stay under exceeding kindness and loving of their parents, with great probability they would encounter with huge difficulties in the life and cannot communicate properly with their surrounded environment. For instances, the last researches of international family agencies reveal that those of parents who don't want permit to their children to present in the community on their feet, lead children to the predicaments in the future and will be very fragile in facing with even small problems. In continue of this report or research has been pointed out that prosperous young teenagers should learn from their parent how find out the best solutions to solve their problems in less time. Therefore, this facing with difficulties is more better than encountering with them in the future.
In conclusion, with taking into account, with considering needs, strengths and flaws, a young adult can create a proper situation in the life to reach a happiness in the future. Although being independent may seem unbearable at first, but it can turn a blind eye to the real life and play a essential role in triumph to predicaments.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 198, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
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... several reasons, three of which that is preparation to face with difficulties, f...
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Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to correct'
Suggestion: to correct
...uture and confer with experts to choose correct ways. In other words, consulting with o...
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Line 7, column 836, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'better' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: better
...efore, this facing with difficulties is more better than encountering with them in the futu...
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Line 9, column 290, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'if', 'may', 'second', 'so', 'therefore', 'for example', 'for instance', 'in conclusion', 'in contrast', 'as a result', 'in other words', 'to begin with', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.255917159763 0.229887763892 111% => OK
Verbs: 0.118343195266 0.158761421928 75% => OK
Adjectives: 0.100591715976 0.0866891130778 116% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0355029585799 0.046263068375 77% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0502958579882 0.0685040099705 73% => OK
Prepositions: 0.147928994083 0.118717715034 125% => OK
Participles: 0.0399408284024 0.0351676179071 114% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.82665931264 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0325443786982 0.0309702414327 105% => OK
Particles: 0.00295857988166 0.00188951952338 157% => OK
Determiners: 0.0828402366864 0.0887237588012 93% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0177514792899 0.0209618222197 85% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00739644970414 0.0139019557991 53% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3733.0 2387.08602151 156% => OK
No of words: 602.0 408.028673835 148% => Less content wanted. Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Chars per words: 6.20099667774 5.86048508987 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.95335121839 4.48200974243 111% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.36877076412 0.338922669872 109% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.269102990033 0.251872472559 107% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.214285714286 0.174417080927 123% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.147840531561 0.112833075102 131% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82665931264 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 298.0 212.727598566 140% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.495016611296 0.524397521467 94% => OK
Word variations: 61.4002239003 59.2087087015 104% => OK
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6684587814 106% => OK
Sentence length: 27.3636363636 20.5533526081 133% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.6468213172 48.84282405 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 169.681818182 120.699889404 141% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.3636363636 20.5533526081 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.727272727273 0.644075263715 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.54480286738 90% => OK
Readability: 54.273935367 45.7405998639 119% => OK
Elegance: 2.17391304348 1.45489161554 149% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.258063622387 0.300154397459 86% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.122797331839 0.103427244359 119% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0687950069023 0.0752933317313 91% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.549076979253 0.497263757937 110% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.119886545027 0.151897553556 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115268007112 0.114077575197 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0604033718143 0.0781384742642 77% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.451275631122 0.336927656856 134% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0653137941623 0.067059652881 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184616625787 0.210909579961 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0828230985544 0.0618886996521 134% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8870967742 109% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.86379928315 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.91756272401 102% => OK
Positive topic words: 11.0 8.42114695341 131% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 2.4623655914 162% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.75985663082 145% => OK
Total topic words: 19.0 13.6433691756 139% => OK
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Rates: 76 out of 100
Scores by essay E-rater: 23 Out of 30