Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better?
Young people often have a definition of being independent means able to make decision on their own. This is true at some extent. Young people, if given the responsibility to carry out own decision would help them grow faster in many aspects of life. In my opinion, I agree with that young people should be made independent from their parents as soon as possible. I have my opinion because of the following reasons elaborated in the next passages.
First of all, as we have been grown under the shadow of protection, care and guidance from our family members and parents, we get accustomed to the environment. We get used to the things our parents does for us, and unknowingly often take it for granted. For example, if young person is allowed to stay away from parents he/she will learn about the things which parents and the family took care for him. Like, washing of clothes, daily meals, taking care of utensils, and much more.
Secondly, being independent from parents would help youngsters to grow in their career and the working of the society. Often, students at their homes are well informed and instructed on the various processes happening in the society. For example, a father might ask his kid to pursue engineering or medical. Whereas, if the kid is moved away from his/ her parents, he will have the opportunity to explore about the field of interest on his own. He gets in touch with different people like friends, seniors, teachers and others. These people will guide and help him finding his interests.
Lastly, independence will bring out self esteem and confidence to be his best and achieve many goals. For example, getting in contact with many people would improve the communication skills, decision making ability and of course a positive outlook towards life. Also, different opinions of people would help the youngster to look and think at an issue from various point of view.
In conclusion, being independent from parents at an early stage would help the young adults to grow personally, intellectually, as well give an opportunity to become a good decision maker in his later life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 566, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[9]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to find' or 'find'.
Suggestion: to find; find
...s. These people will guide and help him finding his interests. Lastly, independence ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, lastly, look, second, secondly, so, well, whereas, for example, in conclusion, of course, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.0286738351 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1762.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 359.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90807799443 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58575052693 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.543175487465 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 536.4 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.8623670929 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.7368421053 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8947368421 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.05263157895 5.45110844103 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238601310817 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0710059500379 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0724011407988 0.0737576698707 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128846721382 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.048256358359 0.0645574589148 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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