Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
Living with parents or not is an essential question for young adults. Some people think that it makes them self-sufficient, if they live in another place from parents, others would rather live in the family continuously.
On the one hand, living with parents is cost-effective as you do not have to pay for the rent of a flat, food and other expenses, which appear when you live alone. Moreover, normally you are full-fed by your mother or father and get pocket money from them, that is why you would be reluctant to find a job. What is more, if your family is wealthy, they may finance you all your life. For example, my friend Alex has grown up in a such type of family and he has never worked anywhere, always been supported by his parents who could not imagine their life without their son.
On the other hand, living alone allows to be free from parents who always like to decide what you should do in your life. Therefore, if you start working earlier, you will not have problems looking for work after graduation from the university due to the fact that you will have relevant experience and skills. In my opinion, it is convenient for people who want to be sure of their future life and to be number one among their groupmates. In addition, one has a possibility to create one's personal life and build up a family as there are no difficulties and hindrances for it. Consequently, living alone gives a person not only freedom and work experience, but also an opportunity to build up his own life.
In conclusion, I would like to say that the wish to live with parents or alone depends on personal preferences of a person in his future life. As for me, I traveled the path of living alone, as I found it better for me, and, to my mind, succeeded in coping on my own.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, if, look, may, moreover, so, therefore, as for, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in my opinion, what is more, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1458.0 1977.66487455 74% => OK
No of words: 326.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.47239263804 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51613035534 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.527607361963 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 465.3 618.680645161 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 33.7579269674 48.9658058833 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.153846154 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0769230769 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.3076923077 5.45110844103 226% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283742787348 0.236089414692 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105436764694 0.076458572812 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0509831955404 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181462011406 0.150856017488 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0534530014335 0.0645574589148 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.94 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 86.8835125448 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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