Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better?

Over the past few decades, many things in the world have been changed which have greatly impacted our lives in several significant aspects, such as our current lifestyle differ from the lifestyle of our parents in many aspects. One of the prominent aspects which have been changed significantly is independence. As far as I concerned, the number of controversies over getting independent are overwhelming, I would explore some of the main controversies which are more conspicuous for me in following paragraphs.
The first thing to be mentioned is that the main reason of young people tend to be independent is our culture has changed, as people in past used to live in a joint family where all member of the family such as grandparents, parents, children, and all sibling lived with peace and harmony under one roof. Nevertheless, in nowadays culture of living in the nuclear family become more prevalent which helps people to become more independent. My personal experience is a compelling example of this issue, when I turned to 18 years old I separated from my parents due to peer pressure which helped me to learn an inordinate amount of thing in my life.
The second issue which needs some words here is that educational system has changed a lot, the school have been trying to prepare students for real life, one of the most integral courses which tough by teachers is” how to become more independence”. An inordinate amount of important quality can be developed through independency such as students enable to do their diurnal tasks by their own, and also they work hard to earn some money in order to pay their bills and buying something for eat. The statistics show that the people who become independent in their young age are more likely to have a stronger conceptual understanding of their lives.
Admittedly, when people separate from their parents at the younger age this action will provide the opportunity to move another country in order to attend to precious university, which would help them to meet lots of people with different culture and language that helps them to broaden their knowledge and even they learn a different language.
Due to the aforementioned reasons I have discussed above, in the fast-changing day, people must be flexible in order to adapt to the situation. It is inevitable that people these days tend to live alone. I am convinced that young people should start independence life as soon as possible. Because it is an opportunity to obtain valuable experiences, self- confidence and take advantage of the advice and help of their family.

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Average: 7.6 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, nevertheless, second, so, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2173.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 434.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0069124424 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56428161445 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88508063078 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.527649769585 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 686.7 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.1344086022 154% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 82.3541691942 48.9658058833 168% => OK
Chars per sentence: 155.214285714 100.406767564 155% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.0 20.6045352989 150% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.57142857143 5.45110844103 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.244728063071 0.236089414692 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0840316586577 0.076458572812 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0488683186172 0.0737576698707 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13057983871 0.150856017488 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0417312724181 0.0645574589148 65% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.7 11.7677419355 150% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.01 58.1214874552 69% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 10.1575268817 152% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.37 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.0537634409 143% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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