Some young people have free time in the evenings after school or on days off from school. Which of the following activities would be most beneficial for young people (ages 14-18) to do in their spare time? Why? a. Gaining practical work experience either at a part-time job or by volunteering in the community b. learning to play a sports c. learning to play a musical instrument.
In the modern world, time plays a significant role, especially for teenagers. And should use the time for improvement. But this situation creates a controversial issue, how people could use the time and what activities would rather do? Each person has a different idea, some the teenager like play instrument, others like going to gem and play sports also some adolescence prefer to find a part job and learning practical something, In my own perspective, I do believe that learning the practical job is more rational and I will elaborate my concept with the following paragraphs.
First of all, nowadays people live in the cooperative world, this mean teenager should be learning fast in the low ages. And use the time in the best way. This situation is useful for the future and helps the teenager will become perfect and have a lot of experience in the different field. Going to the depths, the experience does not be accepted in the short time, on the other hand, the people should be spending more time on that. My friends' experience is compelling this thought. When my friend was a teenager, he went to the repair car shop, and after more years he becomes the skillful man that caring plenty of the experience. Hence, if my friend had not worked in the repair car shop, he would not be the perfect man.
Second, in the modern society, some of the people spend more time on the working. Going in depth, working cause people making money. In fact, making money is a key element in the society. A teenager that knowing practical work easily could make money. According to the article posted in the Economist magazine, people that start to work in younger ages in the adulthood, usually do not have a financial problem in the life. Therefore, this concept like the cycle and each part has the direct effect on the other parts. If teenagers spend time on learning the practical job, they will not have a problem, and the economy going to the forward.
Drawing upon the reasons, I am great to extend on the belief that, spend time on learning the practical job in the younger ages is more significant. Learning practical job not only help people accept a lot of experiences but also help them make money easily.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 100, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to fast'
Suggestion: to fast
..., this mean teenager should be learning fast in the low ages. And use the time in th...
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Line 3, column 32, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...t man. Second, in the modern society, some of the people spend more time on the working. ...
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Line 4, column 259, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s but also help them make money easily.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, second, so, therefore, in fact, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1828.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 389.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.69922879177 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51004813854 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.47557840617 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 566.1 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.8853309777 48.9658058833 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.4 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.45 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.6 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.241102020829 0.236089414692 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0807868277369 0.076458572812 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0479147625177 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151491822511 0.150856017488 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0255104430911 0.0645574589148 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.98 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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