Although, throughout history, working in groups has always had its specific condition, humans have tended to do their duties in groups. In this regard, some people believe that groups can approach to their purposes when there is someone who tries to persist on what he thinks while I have enough reasons to object to this viewpoint. I will enlarge on what I mean in the following paragraphs.
First and foremost, groups’ success is inextricably linked to teamwork, and those who tend to treat in a way that other members of groups consider as a great one can help groups in order to achieve that goal. To put it in a more vivid picture, when people see themselves as a member of groups, they try to do their best. In other words, teamwork motivates people to do their duties in groups as well as possible. As a way of illustration, take those who go hiking. When they decide to climb a mountain, they have to discuss different ways of arriving to apex. Afterwards, all members should follow the group’ decision about that matter. As a result, should anybody try to dictate what he thinks is a great idea, there will be a bunch of conflicts between members. This will lead the group to taking apart. Consequently, those who are interested in doing what other members want can help group more in order to receive its aims.
Secondly, the more people contemplate a subject, the less error will happen in their decisions, so person who is willing to do what other members of group want comes to a better decision with great results for groups. To clarify this point, decisions which are made by a number of people can be more reliable since different people perceive a subject from distinctive aspects. They can consider all details related to that matter, so they will be ready for any kind of problem they may face. Building a skyscraper can be a compelling example of that. When a skyscraper should be built, several engineers, who have different fields of study, should work together in groups. So, civil engineers consider it as a structure, architectures try to give it the best appearance, and electronic engineer want to make its electronic system as efficient as possible. If they wanted to dance by their tune, they would not complete skyscraper.
To sum up, all things considered, I firmly believe that those who tend to obey other members of a group can help it more than who do not want to follow others’ order. That is due to the fact that, in the first case, not only can group increase its teamwork, but also, it can decline the rate of mistake decision-making.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 127, Rule ID: IN_WHO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'whom'?
Suggestion: whom
...embers of a group can help it more than who do not want to follow others’ order. Th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, well, while, i mean, kind of, as a result, as well as, in other words, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 9.8082437276 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.0286738351 199% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2130.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 453.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.70198675497 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61343653406 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61896318682 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.496688741722 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 642.6 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.7808043649 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.428571429 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5714285714 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.80952380952 5.45110844103 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.38877588755 0.236089414692 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122508397452 0.076458572812 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0949987311815 0.0737576698707 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.252190168803 0.150856017488 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0591106003998 0.0645574589148 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.98 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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