Spending time with children
Today, most of parents are too busy in order to occupying with long-hours' job so that they have limited time to spend for other works such as spending time with families as well as children. But, children need lots of attention because they are sensitive. Some believes that parents should allocate more time for monitoring kids' assignment which is related to schoolwork rather than playing games or sports. I prefer to assign time for playing and having fun with my kids. In what follows, I cogently pinpoint my most paramount reasons to justify my standpoint.
To begin with, parents should have plan for spending time with their kids after school. More specifically, having fun and playing game are as important as having proper performance in school. Although, no one can deny the importance of effective education which is necessary for being prosperous ,and accomplishing valuable position in the society. Moreover, children might get tired after doing homework, hence, they can choose which hobbies make them feel good, and helps them to be relaxed. Drawing to my experience, if students do exercises regularly, they will become more energetic because human glands secret hormones that is beneficial for ones' body.
Secondly, children can learn many essential skills through playing game or sport. Subsequently, these type of activities will reinforce both brain performance and social skills. Therefore, they should do their favorable activities after schools as well as in their leisure time. For instance, when children play game with others, they learn how to behave in real situation. Moreover, when they go to the gym for playing sport, they communicate with others. Hence, they can fortify their social skills and learn to make friends.
In light of the reasons as mentioned above, I firmly believe that parents should consider not only kids' schoolwork but also they should be aware of their mental needs. As a result, we can flourish the best generation for the future if we provide desirable atmosphere for nurturing them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the parents') or simply say ''most parents''.
Suggestion: most of the parents; most parents
Today, most of parents are too busy in order to occupying with...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...sy in order to occupying with long-hours job so that they have limited time to sp...
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Line 3, column 36, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'planned'.
Suggestion: planned
...t. To begin with, parents should have plan for spending time with their kids after...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... which is necessary for being prosperous ,and accomplishing valuable position in t...
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Line 3, column 649, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
... secret hormones that is beneficial for ones body. Secondly, children can learn ma...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for instance, such as, as a result, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1718.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 330.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20606060606 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5963243072 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.584848484848 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 510.3 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.556235985 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.4444444444 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3333333333 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.33333333333 5.45110844103 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.276462047294 0.236089414692 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0909812913633 0.076458572812 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.130659210506 0.0737576698707 177% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171895388342 0.150856017488 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.136797782761 0.0645574589148 212% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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