As a student of university that has a long break between university semesters, the university requires all students to do one of the following for one month during the break:
(1)students must take a course on the subject that has no direct connection to their majors of study.
(2)students must volunteer to work in the city where the university is located or their hometowns to improve some aspects of life of the city or their own town.
which one do you think is more beneficial for students in their university. Why?
<span style="font-size: 17.6px;">The summer holiday is always precious for college students, and properly utilizing it could benefit students a lot. Recently, there has been a hard choice in the following long break. Some choose to become volunteers and make a contribution to the society, while from my perspective of view, an extra course, which is irrelevant with students’ majors, would be more beneficial in the long run, simply because it can improve their interpersonal ability and give them a competitive edge during interviews.
To begin with, students could be more sociable than ever before, since an additional course create an atmosphere to communicate with each other, and even to cooperate closely in order to achieve the common goal. During this progress, amounts of friendship could be harvest and we all know that “Friendship can multiply joy and divide sadness”. Just take how I met Oliver, who becomes my close friend after the summer course, as a good example. Frankly speaking, I had known Oliver much earlier before our friendship was built. What impressed me most was that we were entirely different people. Once in a summer lecture, we were occasionally arranged into the same group. It was till then that we had the first conversation, and I realized that we actually shared so much in common. Had I not participate that summer course, we could still be strangers.
What’s more, attending an extra course would bring students huge advantages during interviews. Spending precious time in an irrelevant field seems to be ridiculous, but this kind of lecture provides an opportunity for students to enrich their knowledge from another aspect. Thus, compound talents, which are most wanted in this fast pace world, are cultivated. One of my personal experiences can be cited here to illustrate this. Since I had attended a business summer school, I claimed my point from not only a theological perspective but also a marketing angle when I was asked to talk about my opinion on artificial intelligence in my last interview, which helped me successfully impress the interviewer and get that internship. Had I not participate in that summer course, the interviewer would not offer me that job.
Admitting that doing a volunteer work, to some extent, does produce a positive effect on the society, what I want to stress here is that we can properly utilize part-time to do such things in the daily life, instead of wasting the whole break, because such a long period is extremely limited and should be organized to do something much more valuable and meaningful. Besides taking a course, traveling to another country, for example, would a wise choice as well, since we can hardly visit such regions during the semesters.
Hence, students would benefit from a different taste of course much more than volunteering if we take the long break into consideration, because it can enlarge their friend circle and sharpen their competitive edge. Indeed, we can devote ourselves to part-time volunteering.</span>
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, besides, but, first, frankly, hence, if, so, still, then, thus, well, while, for example, kind of, of course, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2583.0 1977.66487455 131% => OK
No of words: 493.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23935091278 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71206996034 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08441177923 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 278.0 212.727598566 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.563894523327 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 801.9 618.680645161 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 89.1657734077 48.9658058833 182% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.0 100.406767564 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4761904762 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.61904761905 5.45110844103 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.141141117583 0.236089414692 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0419675714665 0.076458572812 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0445292809663 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0894475411522 0.150856017488 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0297323587429 0.0645574589148 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 10.9000537634 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 86.8835125448 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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