As a student of university that has a long break between university semesters, the university requires all students to do one of the following for one month during the break:
(1)students must take a course on the subject that has no direct connection to their majors of study.
(2)students must volunteer to work in the city where the university is located or their hometowns to improve some aspects of life of the city or their own town.
which one do you think is more beneficial for students in their university. Why?
it is really important how we use our free time and make them useful for our life. Due to the fact that university years are time to flourish our talents, free times in these years come to count more than other years. some universities have policy that students should take some unrelated courses from their majors. other universities use another policy and students should get some volunteer works in their university or hometown. I personally believe that the second policy has more benefits for students and their town. In the following paragraphs, I will elaborate on my viewpoint.
For the first reason, I believe that if the students work in university years they can improve their social skills, and it is more beneficial for them compared to take some extra courses. many students have a lack of confidence, and they are introverted, so they are not good at communicating with others. it goes without saying, in any job, we should communicate with others. As a result, if these students do not practice and improve their social skills, they will have many problems in their future. this universities’ policy can has a huge impact on these students and increase their social abilities. From my perspective, taking unrelated courses has not many advantages; because, already students have many courses that are not useful for them and they will forget them in the future. so, I believe should students take unrelated courses in their free time, they waste their time.
For another noteworthy reason, students by working in their university and hometown can help others, and improve others’ quality of life. For instance, students can work in some volunteer organizations and cook food for homeless people or help and take care of old people in their city. In this way, not only students can improve their skills but also can help others and improve their quality of life.
To wrap it up, working in the break between university semesters has many advantages for students and other people. students can improve their social skills and it has many benefit for their future. also, students can improve other people life by helping them. Despite the fact that taking unrelated courses can has some benefits, I totally believe that working is more beneficial for all students.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, really, second, so, for instance, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1935.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 380.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09210526316 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41515443553 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59297340525 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 212.727598566 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.423684210526 0.524837075471 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 606.6 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.635061715 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.75 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.35 5.45110844103 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.260199347879 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106529675898 0.076458572812 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0665682727844 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.192635790385 0.150856017488 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0359949117128 0.0645574589148 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.03 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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