Students are more influenced  by their teacher than by their friends.

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Students are more influenced  by their teacher than by their friends.

Some people think that the relation between teachers and students are the best relation. People believe that students obey teachers in every thing. Although I understand their point of view, I have a different opinion. I believe that students are more influenced by their friends. The basis of my opinion is social and educational.
 
From a social perspective, students spend most of the time with their friends. Students just spend about six hours in school with their teachers. When students go to school, they know that they should  work and study. It is some thing unenjoyable for them to sit for six hours with the teachers listen and obey them. However, spending more enjoyable time with their friends playing soccer or video games is the most entertintable ever. students then will like to spend the time with their friend and consequently  friends become the most influential.
 
 
Educationally, students nowadays are more knowledgeable than before. Due to the advanced technology students have access to huge amount of information through the internet. The relation between the students and the teachers does not look like before. Today students are more dependent on themselves. They can get more information from the internet easily. On the other hand, in the past students were totally depend on their teachers in every thing. Teachers were the only source of information. That is why students today are less influenced by their teachers. Moreover, due to the advanced technology  there is a big gape between students and teachers. Some old teachers are not able to deal with the new technology, which leads to serious problems between the two generations. It ended up that students become less influential with their teachers than before.
 
 
 
In conclusion, for the reasons I mentioned above , I believe that students  are more influenced  with their friends than their teachers, as they spend more time with them. The time that they spend with friends is enjoyable time. Students do not have to listen, obey or even following boring rules. Furthermore, the technology leads students to depend more on their self.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, furthermore, however, if, look, moreover, so, then, in conclusion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1809.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 350.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16857142857 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72934175544 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 212.727598566 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.457142857143 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 519.3 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.6417465088 48.9658058833 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 69.5769230769 100.406767564 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.4615384615 20.6045352989 65% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.76923076923 5.45110844103 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.515181503383 0.236089414692 218% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.166496729591 0.076458572812 218% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.145110999324 0.0737576698707 197% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.357798894832 0.150856017488 237% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.061604880619 0.0645574589148 95% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.11 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.08 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 4.5 10.002688172 45% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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