Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends.
Many would say that instructors make the most significant impacts on students. In some sense, it might true in that authorities of teachers are powerful than that of peer students. Teachers easily control their students with school's regulations and rules. However, I still disagree with the given statement that students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends.
First of all, a student can change own thought and behavior by friends' advice. With in-depth understanding to each other, friends can give useful and best-suited advice that students need. This advice causes fundamental changes in how students act because it is highly possible to fit well in their situations. On the other hand, teachers who have few chance to have deep conservation with their students cannot give proper advice. For instance, when I was a high school student, I did not understand why I have to study because I want to be a chef. Although all of my teachers made me to study harder, I thought all of advice is just obsolete thus pretended to study hard. One day, one of my friends whose dream was a dance-singer told me in earnest that he studies to prepare unexpected events in the future and advised me to study harder for sure. As a result, his sincere advice moved my mind and I started to get interested in studies, which could never have done by teachers.
Moreover, since students spend more time with friends than teachers, friends can influence broader aspects of life. During spending whole days inside and outside of a classroom, the young tend to mimic their friends' life style, hobbies, and any other habits in daily life as well as their behaviors in classroom. For example, when I was a middle school student, I had a friend who was very diligent. She woke up early in the morning, did regular exercises, and did not procrastinate what she had to do. I was totally different from her, being lazy and languish. However, I started to learn from her and tried to emulate her life cycle and finally succeed. In this regard, friends affect students in every aspects of life, which cannot be done by teachers who spend limited time with their students during the classes.
In conclusion, I firmly believe that friends affect students more than teachers do. Students spend many time with their friends and their teachers. As a result, there are more chances to observe friend's behavior which is worth to follow and get a sincere advice from them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun chance seems to be countable; consider using: 'few chances'.
Suggestion: few chances
...s. On the other hand, teachers who have few chance to have deep conservation with their st...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun time seems to be countable; consider using: 'many times'.
Suggestion: many times
...s more than teachers do. Students spend many time with their friends and their teachers. ...
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Message: Did you mean 'changes'?
Suggestion: changes
...r teachers. As a result, there are more chances to observe friends behavior which is wo...
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'sincere advice'.
Suggestion: sincere advice
...havior which is worth to follow and get a sincere advice from them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, moreover, so, still, thus, well, as to, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, as well as, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2051.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 422.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86018957346 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53239876712 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5308289844 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514218009479 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 612.0 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.1303105637 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.2272727273 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1818181818 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.59090909091 5.45110844103 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.389997867966 0.236089414692 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125037872552 0.076458572812 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.154835202961 0.0737576698707 210% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.302118746743 0.150856017488 200% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.144581386059 0.0645574589148 224% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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