Students must volunteer to work in the university’s city or their hometowns to improve some aspects of life of the city or their own town.
From a general standpoint, in today's sophisticated world we observe, in which all people are striving to make their life easier, it is not far-fetched for one to presume that students play a crucial role in reaching this goal and pushing forward their societies. Although some people believe that students don't have any responsibility about their hometown, I reckon that they must volunteer to work there rather than their university's city. In the following paragraphs, I will substantiate my viewpoint.
First and foremost, students who come from countryside, can fulfill their emotional responsibility through volunteering in some work. When a person is born in a country or even in a city, he uses his home town's resources, and his personality is shaped in there. So, it is normal that he has some responsibilities about its headway as they are grown up. Also, all of us have a deep feeling about where we are nurtured. It goes without saying that all students according to their majors can be beneficial for push their hometown forward. For instance, assume a medical student who has come from a small village to a city in order to push back the frontiers of knowledge, and become an intellectual doctor. If he volunteers to serve to his village in curing the patients, he can accomplish his moral responsibilities about his hometown. By virtue of this, not only do students achieve a sense of self-satisfaction but they also, would get involved in their hometowns.
Secondly, there are a myriad of students in city to volunteer to work, however in small town or villages no one wants to work there. Nowadays, due to the welfare and advancement of facilities, most people are inclined to live in cities rather than small town. So, these towns are in desperate need of paying painstaking attention. As a matter of fact, if students from towns volunteer to work there, some of their hurdles would be surmounted. For example, I came from a small village to a prestigious university in Tehran in major of foreign language. Last year when I came back there, I decided to attending some courses in which I can teach English to the children. Although it was an ephemeral event, it deeply affected on the children and they got capable to speak English a little. Had I not volunteered in that course for teaching, my hometown's children never have been acquainted with the international language.
To sum up, students most volunteer to work in their hometown due to the fact that they owe to their land, and in this way, they can fulfill their responsibility. Also, since rarely, are people willing to work there, it is more fruitful that native students volunteer. If all students consider this meticulously, which means if all students volunteer to work related to their major in their own cities, all of cities whose people are suffering from deficient of facilities and instructors, will be improved, and people’s lives all around the world run smoothly which means we will have a better world.
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... all around the world run smoothly which means we will have a better world.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, for example, for instance, i reckon, as a matter of fact, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 78.0 52.1666666667 150% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2499.0 1977.66487455 126% => OK
No of words: 507.0 407.700716846 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92899408284 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74517233601 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92208790068 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 254.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.500986193294 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 770.4 618.680645161 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.173595291 48.9658058833 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.590909091 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0454545455 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.45454545455 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.403695525546 0.236089414692 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111793694867 0.076458572812 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0993071987666 0.0737576698707 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.263924385606 0.150856017488 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.028293019699 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 86.8835125448 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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