Students in a university club want to help others, but they can only choose one project a year, which one of the following is the best? A. Help those students in a nearby primary school with reading and mathematics; B. Help people who cannot afford to build or rent a home to build a house; C. Visit and assist elderly people with daily tasks.
The help has an influential and tremendous impact on our lives. In fact, it is vitally important to teach the young generation how to assist people from an early age because they are the pillars and the power that can guide our nation toward progress. Moreover, there a myriad number of people who really need aid and especially those who live an impoverished life. Therefore, I believe that it is critical to help those who do not have enough money to live in a shelter rather than the students or the elderly people. The following explanations go as follows
To begin with, it is crucial that all the inhabitants have a place to live in, which it is one of life's amenities that people work hard to have it. Indeed, nowadays, there are much homeless roaming in streets without a roof to protect them from the hot and cold weather, thus, our children should learn how to endow those poor people with the essential needs must start to pay attention to them, in order, to assist them. For instance, my teacher used to surge me and my peers to conduct a project that could lead to a positive impact on our communities, so, we devoted time and put flyers everywhere in our city to ask the dwellers to give us money to endow the homeless with a place to preserve them from the dramatic effect of the weather because our country faces much ecosystem disturbances, as a result, people began to allocate money for them and helped them to build a house. Consequently, spending the effort to help the poor people to have shelter have an indelible effect on our culture as this will decrease the homeless in the street.
Second, children must start to learn how to have the sense of independence and responsibility from an early age. in fact, parents and the teachers who are the role model for them must surge and encourage them to help the poor people because this will have a great influence on their personalities. for example, I taught to be an outgoing person since I was a child, because my community teacher always advocated me to provide all the needs that poor people want, thus, this had a great impact on my personality. In conclusion, it is crucial to aid whoever need us because this has an imperative role to enhance our perspective.
To sum up, even there are many people need much help, but, the priorities are for those who lose having a home to protect them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, if, moreover, really, second, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, as a result, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1950.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 426.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.57746478873 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54050048151 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492957746479 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 619.2 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 20.1344086022 159% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 95.9966715399 48.9658058833 196% => OK
Chars per sentence: 150.0 100.406767564 149% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.7692307692 20.6045352989 159% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.6153846154 5.45110844103 231% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169041137545 0.236089414692 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0710001643765 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0459782964785 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119838552648 0.150856017488 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0496754800145 0.0645574589148 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 11.7677419355 140% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.46 58.1214874552 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.88 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.0537634409 147% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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