Students at a university often have a choice of places to live. They may choose to live in university dormitories, or they may choose to live in an apartments in community. Compare the advantages of living in university housing with the advantages of living in an apartment in community. Where would you prefer to live?
When I was leaving the home for going to university, I was a little nervous with the idea of living in a dormitory. Then, several months later I concluded that the environment of the dormitory kept me actively studying and I had so many friends who were always there for me whenever I needed. However I personally think that both options have got their own positive and negative sides.
Besides the many advantages of staying at a dormitory, two of the most essential are social relationship and security. Staying at the dormitory teaches you the manners that you should have for staying with a lot people in the same building. You will meet a lot of people with a variety of personalities in the dormitory: some of them are pleasant, some of them are not, but you can build up your network of acquaintances and enrich your life with many new friends simply by living among other college students. Furthermore, having many friends makes you feel emotionally strong when you are far away from your family. Another advantage is of the dorm is certainly the security. There is usually a security desk and the main doors are locked in addition to the lock on your room.
On the other hand, staying in an apartment flat would provide more privacy and freedom, since there are dormitory rules that you must obey like not playing the music after some certain time of night or to be in your room at the check hours. You can have your own room and your own bathroom. Moreover, you can experience how to be “on your own”, doing the dishes, cooking for yourself and other chores which might be beneficial for your further life.
Because security and social relationships are two of my most important values, I prefer dormitory life. I had the best memories with my friends in my dormitory and I can’t imagine living in an apartment flat all alone.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 294, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
... always there for me whenever I needed. However I personally think that both options ha...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, then, in addition, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1522.0 1977.66487455 77% => OK
No of words: 326.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.66871165644 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54693604351 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.546012269939 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 483.3 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.032984131 48.9658058833 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.714285714 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2857142857 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.42857142857 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.127055301428 0.236089414692 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0476091712493 0.076458572812 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0451513401673 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0844741155805 0.150856017488 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0350677827627 0.0645574589148 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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