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For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school.

Hard work of a person always pays off in certain stages of life or the future. In a general scenario, that person who is arduous was found to get success in his/her life. Personally, I disagree with the given statement: it is better altho has a good relationship rather than struggle in life. I feel this way for the two reasons, which I will explore in the following essays.
First of all, when a person was busy or involved in any type of work which requires some memory power, it increases the persons' ideas, skills, and it finally makes a person more intelligent. It leads to the development of the capacity of any individual person. Moreover, it will decrease the dependency of any person. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. I used to study or work hard from my earlier childhood. I am very enthusiastic in reading, and my favourite subject is computer. Later, after my school life for further study, I have chosen the computer and got a master's degree. Finally, I became a software engineer. It is all the outcomes of my hard work. In contrast to it, one of my friends who used to focus on making a good relationship from his earlier school level was a lower position in a profile as compared to mine. Also, I have a great chance to upgrade in my later life, however, it would be difficult for him.
Secondly, relationship is a ephemeral things, while hard work is not eternal. Relationship might be broken, and whole the work or performances would be dismissed, but it would be difficult to degrade the hard work of any person. For instances, in comparision with any scientists and any politicians, later have a high chance to have a degrading career in the part of life. Here, scientists path in life is in progressive direction, and in same respect, there is a high fluctuations in the game of the politics. This creates the process of up and down in the person who believes in the term of a relationship. Although, good relationship gives short time happiness and success, it can be broken in any parts of the life.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that to get a success in future job or career, it is better to be a laborioius from the time of school level. This is because, hard work of any person also pays off in proclivity, and because the term hard work is not transient.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 27, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ult for him. Secondly, relationship is a ephemeral things, while hard work is no...
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Line 3, column 39, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'thing'?
Suggestion: thing
... Secondly, relationship is a ephemeral things, while hard work is not eternal. Relati...
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Line 3, column 469, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'fluctuation'?
Suggestion: fluctuation
...n, and in same respect, there is a high fluctuations in the game of the politics. This creat...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, thus, while, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, in contrast, first of all, in contrast to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1903.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 418.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.55263157895 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52162009685 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78678561792 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.485645933014 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 612.0 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.7065202879 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.7391304348 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1739130435 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.08695652174 5.45110844103 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.127334456497 0.236089414692 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0383040255532 0.076458572812 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0383572688428 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0932290934889 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.04255004424 0.0645574589148 66% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 11.7677419355 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.81 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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