I disagree about that technology has made children less creative nowadays. Because children can learn with creativity in different ways using technology. There are my reasons to support my opinion.
First of all, technology improves children's development of their creativity. There are a lot of apps on smartphones that have the tools for a child get better their music creative skills. For example, I have a son, Felipe and he is 8 years old, and because of I love music, I always wanted that he learn to create music. I downloaded an app called, music project for kids. I showed to my son and he started to use this app. Some days after this, something unbelievable happened, Felipe came to me and showed me a music that he created using my cellphone, first he recorded his voice and then the instruments. The app coalesce this, he learned to create music, even this music was very simple. In the past, this would be very difficult to happen.
Second, because of a lot of websites, for example educationkids.com are available. These sites are improving children creativity with lessons and activities specific for kids. I have a friend, Roberto, and he has a son, with 6 years old. This little boy had some difficulties to learn and to write. Roberto went to see a doctor to discuss this and the doctor suggested this site to him because of they are very user-friendly. Robert started to use with his son and this site has a lot of ways to improve speaking and writing skills, involving create something, this actions created the feeling inside the kid, that he could create something. For example, a short history, and this creation improved their writing skills. In addition, in this site, there are a lot of games educational, involving some paintings to describe things.
In conclusion technology improve the sense of create something and help they with some difficulty that they may have, making children more creative using apps or internet to do this. These tools are very easy to use and help a lot the develop of creativity.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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... son, Felipe and he is 8 years old, and because of I love music, I always wanted that he lea...
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...voice and then the instruments. The app coalesce this, he learned to create music, even ...
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...his would be very difficult to happen. Second, because of a lot of websites...
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...ols are very easy to use and help a lot the develop of creativity.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, may, second, so, then, for example, in addition, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1696.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 351.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83190883191 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32839392791 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7215598342 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.490028490028 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 532.8 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.6319112561 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.7619047619 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7142857143 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.14285714286 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.134980438072 0.236089414692 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.058351141188 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.117693416776 0.0737576698707 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138181356383 0.150856017488 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.122746709768 0.0645574589148 190% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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