Technology has made the world a better place to live

Essay topics:

Technology has made the world a better place to live.

Technology development plays the important role in the every sectors- health, education and industrial- of the world. It is my firm belief that technological development has made the world better place to live for a number of reasons, and I will develop these ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.

To begin with, technological development in the medical sectors of the world makes the possibility of better living of healthy life. The people in the present situation can make their body check up using the different technology, in order to know about the condition of their body. There are availability of video x-rays, x-ray machine, MRI, laboratory instrument, etc in the field of the medical for the identification of the different abnormalities and disorders that might present in the human body. It made possible for the people to identify the disorders and to take the measures to mitigate the disorder. I have to admit that, my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my own personal experience. When I was 12 years old, I was suffer from the fractured of bone. At that time, the doctor told me that I was not fracture and prescribed me some medicine to use, but these medicines donot work on me. After the long time pain i again went to the doctor again, and he suggest me to carried out the X-ray. After the X-ray, It was found that my bone has been fractured and finally doctor prescribed me medicine related to this issue and my fractured bone was cured.

Secondly, the technological development in the communication sector helps to connect the whole world. In the present world, the people living in one country can easily get connected with the people in another country with the means of internet. The development of internet, Facebook, viber, email, etc not only helps in connecting the people but also play the important role in the management of different official work and decisions. For instance, if the student wants to apply for the aboard study then he needs to make the contact with the professor of the particular university. In this situation, the student can make contact with professor through the means of skype, email, etc. in order to make the important talks. That’s why technology plays an important role in the better living.

Last but not least, the technological development plays an important role in the conservation of environment by replacing the firewood by electrical cooking appliances for the different cooking purpose. It not only helps to conserve the environment but also prevent the people from exposing to the harmful gases that are produced through firewood burning and resulting in the better and healthier lifestyle.

In light of the above mentioned reasons, I strongly agree with the statement that technology made the world a better place to live.

Votes
Average: 8.2 (2 votes)
Essay Categories
Independent TOEFL Writing

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 754, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'suffered'.
Suggestion: suffered
...erience. When I was 12 years old, I was suffer from the fractured of bone. At that tim...
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Line 3, column 990, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'suggests'.
Suggestion: suggests
... again went to the doctor again, and he suggest me to carried out the X-ray. After the ...
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Line 5, column 201, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... easily get connected with the people in another country with the means of intern...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, if, second, secondly, so, then, for instance, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 76.0 52.1666666667 146% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 8.0752688172 248% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2362.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 471.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01486199575 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65859790218 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82687441109 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.473460721868 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 744.3 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.5770276116 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.476190476 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4285714286 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.7619047619 5.45110844103 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.284417411872 0.236089414692 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0935970897631 0.076458572812 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.145156302195 0.0737576698707 197% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.23947322369 0.150856017488 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.186398261085 0.0645574589148 289% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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