Television advertising directed toward young children(aged two to five) should not be allowed.
A famous talk show host once said that advertising was born with sin. I think he means that commercials usually don't transfer genuine information, and many people hold a negative view about advertisements, especially those targeting children who are two to five years old. However, I believe with proper regulations and guidance, television advertising is not necessarily bad for children, and there is no need to ban such advertisement.
From my point of view, no matter who the target group is, advertising is indispensable to today's society. Modern society are comprised of various companies, and companies uses advertising to promote their products. Without advertising, it takes a long time for good products to be known by consumers, so it is economically inefficient. Products like toys, foods or other things designed for young children, to promotes such products itself have no harm towards anyone.
Some people might argue that those ads misguided the children and give the children wrong impression of such products. Such a view is only true under the premise of lack of proper guidance and regulations. Government can pose strict rules on the types and forms of such advertisements, in order to minimize the bad impacts. Moreover, parents are responsible to teacher their children to understand advertisements. To ban advertisements just because it may bring about potential harm is not sensible, it is like to stay starving just to avoid choking. We've stepped into an era when children are intensely exposed to social media and information, teach them to be critical about the information is a better solution, not to avoid it.
To conclude, as to whether advertisements toward young children should be banned, we ought to look at the whole picture. I believe inhibit such advertisements would cause more harm. And there are solutions to avoid potential problems.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, look, may, moreover, so, as to, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 43.0788530466 46% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1587.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 301.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27242524917 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09142951685 2.67179642975 116% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.637873754153 0.524837075471 122% => OK
syllable_count: 490.5 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.1121474743 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.1875 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8125 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.45110844103 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247983216482 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0673014639783 0.076458572812 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0673390469453 0.0737576698707 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151894337523 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0544977314194 0.0645574589148 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.002688172 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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