Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.
Advertising about their brand new products is a critically important method of making profit. Hence, it is no surprise that products, which have children as their target group, telecast advertisement to attract children to them. Those advertisements are beneficial for both the companies and the customers in some ways.
To begin with, parents become aware of the brand new products meant for their children from the television advertisement, and they can provide their children with the best available products in the market. Parents remain busy with their jobs and have hardly any time to analyze the products available in the market for their children. Because of time limitation they cannot just go to the market and find out which product has the best resources for their children. However, advertisements about those products in television assist them to judge the product while at home; information about newly available products help the parents to give an opportunity to their children to enjoy the best products in the market. For example, when I was a young child my parents used to buy me a particular brand of chocolates. They were very busy with their jobs and on their way home they used to bring with them only that brand of chocolate; in fact it was the only brand they were aware of. Meanwhile, one day they saw advertisement about a new brand of chocolate in the television. Then they found out that the new brand actually was much more economical and attractive than the previous one; next day they bought me that new chocolate. Without the advertisement of the chocolate they would not have change the brand which used to cost them more money.
Secondly, children get information about products that help them to do argument with other children about those products, and these arguments help their brain development. Ability to do argument and debate with other people is a great way to become a smart citizen. For instance, there may be variety of brands of toys in market. If those companies advertise their own products in television, then there may be divergent response from the children about those products. While at school, those children will do argument with each other about their choices. They may provide evidence for their choice and undermine the points made by the others. Debates like these help the brain and mental growth of the children, and we in turn get some smart future citizen who has the ability to judge between similar kinds of choices.
Television advertising targeted towards the children is an important thing. It helps the parents to make themselves aware of the new products available in the market for their children and makes ensure the proper mental growth of our future citizens.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, hence, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, while, for example, for instance, in fact, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2286.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 458.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99126637555 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62611441266 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59815419429 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.445414847162 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 703.8 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.8240301119 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.857142857 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8095238095 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.128415613358 0.236089414692 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.055224944032 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0558451394499 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108311386426 0.150856017488 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0296963103264 0.0645574589148 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.37 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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